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Anonymous Posted 18 years ago
Letter Writing
Please help me with my motivation letter for a master's degree in management
Please tell me what I should change in my motivation letter.
Dear Sir or Madam, Dear Admission Officer
I am a Greek citizen and hereby apply for admission to study in the Master in Management program at University of XY Business School.
In May 2008 I graduated from with a Bachelor in IR, with a major in II economics. My Bachelor-Thesis is about Bank Mergers in . The master program of your university is the best instrument to deepen my knowledge in the relevant fields of marketing and management to succeed in achieving my goals. It furthermore provides the chance to study in an international environment which will be important for enhancing my intercultural competence and language skills.
The desire to do further study after graduating got stronger when I heard about the diverse possibilities to participate in a master program abroad. I think with its proven excellent teaching and outstanding international focus XY is the best option for me to develop personally and academically.
My future plan is to start a career in financial management in an internationally oriented company. My goal is to work as an analyst for one of the top investment banks or hedge funds, or as a Financial Advisor for a private trust in any world financial centre. To achieve this, I need to complete my academic background and to take the Master’s Degree in Management from which offers an outstanding education and has a superior reputation.
Having this knowledge will allow me to better understand management principles. With all the uncertainty and changes in the world, in political, economic, and technological fields, I believe that a successful manager must have a solid understanding, supported by a strong academic foundation, of how to guide companies through these challenging times.
I am however open-minded and prepared to meet all challenges presented to me. I am convinced that a Master’s Degree in Management will give me an opportunity to build a successful career and become a true professional, contributing value to my future companies.
Dear Sir or Madam, Dear Admission Officer
I am a Greek citizen and hereby apply for admission to study in the Master in Management program at University of XY Business School.
In May 2008 I graduated from with a Bachelor in IR, with a major in II economics. My Bachelor-Thesis is about Bank Mergers in . The master program of your university is the best instrument to deepen my knowledge in the relevant fields of marketing and management to succeed in achieving my goals. It furthermore provides the chance to study in an international environment which will be important for enhancing my intercultural competence and language skills.
The desire to do further study after graduating got stronger when I heard about the diverse possibilities to participate in a master program abroad. I think with its proven excellent teaching and outstanding international focus XY is the best option for me to develop personally and academically.
My future plan is to start a career in financial management in an internationally oriented company. My goal is to work as an analyst for one of the top investment banks or hedge funds, or as a Financial Advisor for a private trust in any world financial centre. To achieve this, I need to complete my academic background and to take the Master’s Degree in Management from which offers an outstanding education and has a superior reputation.
Having this knowledge will allow me to better understand management principles. With all the uncertainty and changes in the world, in political, economic, and technological fields, I believe that a successful manager must have a solid understanding, supported by a strong academic foundation, of how to guide companies through these challenging times.
I am however open-minded and prepared to meet all challenges presented to me. I am convinced that a Master’s Degree in Management will give me an opportunity to build a successful career and become a true professional, contributing value to my future companies.
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To Whom It May Concern:
I would like to take the opportunity to formally submit my application for the graduate program of Master in Management provided at University of XY.
Actually, after having been graduated, in 2008, from YY University with a Bachelor of IR in II economics, the Master program proposed by your College of Business is the best way for me to deepen my knowledge
I would like to take the opportunity to formally submit my application for the graduate program of Master in Management provided at University of XY.
Actually, after having been graduated, in 2008, from YY University with a Bachelor of IR in II economics, the Master program proposed by your College of Business is the best way for me to deepen my knowledge
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Hi,
Never start such a letter with To Whom It May Concern.
If you search the forum, you'll find a lot of explanations about this rarely-used phrase which seems to fascinate English learners.
Instead, say 'Dear Sir or Madam', or use the person's name if you know it.
Best wishes, Clive
Never start such a letter with To Whom It May Concern.
If you search the forum, you'll find a lot of explanations about this rarely-used phrase which seems to fascinate English learners.
Instead, say 'Dear Sir or Madam', or use the person's name if you know it.
Best wishes, Clive
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For sure, it is always better to put the name of the person in charge of the recruitment, but in that case we obviously don't know who he/she is writing to. Anyway, "To whom it may concern" is not made for only for "beginners," as you said. I personally use that expression and many many people use it, including some teachers that I had at university. Keep in mind that this forum basically remains
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Hi,
You seem to have misunderstood what I wrote. I didn't say that 'To whom it may concern' is only for beginners. My point was that beginners seem to like using this phrase in situatons where it is not appropriate.
For most people, the only time they need this phrase is when writing a general letter of reference for someone.
Clive
You seem to have misunderstood what I wrote. I didn't say that 'To whom it may concern' is only for beginners. My point was that beginners seem to like using this phrase in situatons where it is not appropriate.
For most people, the only time they need this phrase is when writing a general letter of reference for someone.
Clive
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