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Do As Infinity Posted 21 years ago
Essay & Composition Writing
Please help me with my intro
Please take a look at my introduction to see if there are any grammatical mistakes and it makes sense. Thank you so much.
While, flood stories have been a common thread in many religions across the globe, many of us are most familiar with the story of Noah’s Ark. It is a well-known segment of the Old Testament, and an interesting story of how God punished the world for how corrupt it had become. This story, however, has roots deep in the past, some of which we can take as factual such as the existence of torrential rain, and the mountains in which the righteous heroes’ boats were landed on, substantiated by archaeological evidences.
While, flood stories have been a common thread in many religions across the globe, many of us are most familiar with the story of Noah’s Ark. It is a well-known segment of the Old Testament, and an interesting story of how God punished the world for how corrupt it had become. This story, however, has roots deep in the past, some of which we can take as factual such as the existence of torrential rain, and the mountains in which the righteous heroes’ boats were landed on, substantiated by archaeological evidences.
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Hi No comma after while and evidence not evidences.
- Hi No comma after while and evidence not evidences.
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i believe you should add a semicolon
This story; however, has roots deep in the past, some of which we can take as factual such as the existence of torrential rain, and the mountains in which the righteous heroes’ boats were landed on, substantiated by archaeological evidences.
This story; however, has roots deep in the past, some of which we can take as factual such as the existence of torrential rain, and the mountains in which the righteous heroes’ boats were landed on, substantiated by archaeological evidences.
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