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Topic: Some people think spoken communication is more powerful than written communication. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Write at least 250 words.

TASK

Many people consider oral communication to be superior to written communication. However, I partly agree with this statement; in my opinion, deciding which types of communication is more effective, depends on certain circumstances.

On the one hand, the main reason why spoken communication is believed to be more powerful than written communication is that people are more likely to understand what other speakers are feeling. In face-to-face conversations, the emotions of the speakers tend to be conveyed simultaneously with the intended message. Those emotions including excitement, passion, or even nervousness can be expressed through the tone of the speakers, their gestures, face expressions, etc. In contrast, reading off the same text from a piece of paper may not be as effective because of the lack of proper manner of the speakers. For example, in dating events, by observing their partners talking, people can figure out their true feelings, so they may have the chance to understand more about each other. Therefore, in the attempt to enhance mutual relationships, spoken communication would be more powerful than other means of communication.

However, I would argue that written communication is not less effective. The power of such means lies in its reliability due to its stability. To illustrate this, when a piece of information is written or printed down, there can be hardly any way that those information can be modified, as a result the possibility of misinterpretation can be mitigated, protecting the authenticity of the information. Take business contracts as an example, these documents are discussed, then printed beyond the agreement of all parties, so when a conflict emerges, the contracts can prove their value as an reliable proof. In other words, in circumstances requiring authenticity and stability, written communication tends to be more effective.

In conclusion, each method of communication has its own strengths and weaknesses, so people need to consider carefully when using them to get a pleasant result.