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Maihue Posted 7 years ago
Essay & Composition Writing

Please Help Me With My Essay - IELTS Task 1 (5)

(From the left side, the schools are Royston Academy, Greystone High, Harble Secondary, Fairfield Girls and Crackend Boys.)

The table compares the percentages of students who enrolled in higher educational institutes from five secondary schools during a six-year period from 1995 to 2000.

Overall, the percentages of high school entrants from Royston Academy and Harble Secondary both increased, while that of Greystone High experienced a fall. We can also see a fluctuation in the percentages of students in Fairfield Girls and Cracken Boys who got their formal schooling at higher level.

In 1995, half of the pupils in Royston Academy continued their education at high schools, which was 20% more than that of Harble Secondary. The percentages of pupils entering colleges from these two organizations gradually rose and reached 60% and 80% in 2000. In contrast, there was a decrease in the percentages of Greyston High students who chose to get higher education. From 90% in 1995, it dropped to 70% in 2000.

Meanwhile, the percentages of entrants to high schools from Fairfield Girls and Crackend Boys fluctuated over the period. Out of six years, 1995 was the time when these single-sex schools had the highest percentages of students applying for a place in higher educational establishments (75% in the women’s school and 61% in the men’s school).

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Top answer

Remember my earlier advice? Only living creatures can see, witness or experience things. Years are not living creatures.

— AlpheccaStars

  • Remember my earlier advice?
  • Only living creatures can see, witness or experience things.
  • Years are not living creatures.
  • You can use anthropomorphism in Task 2, but avoid it in Task 1.
  • You did the same thing in this essay, except, instead of years, it was percentages.
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Remember my earlier advice?

Only living creatures can see, witness or experience things. Years are not living creatures. You can use anthropomorphism in Task 2, but avoid it in Task 1.

You did the same thing in this essay, except, instead of years, it was percentages. Percentages are not living creatures. They do not experience things.

The table compares

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