PLEASE HELP ME WITH MY ESSAY ABOUT SCHOOL UNIFORMS! THANK YOU!

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Essay Title: All children should be made to wear school uniforms. To what extent do you agree or disagree?ResponseIn every country, students usually are made to wear uniforms at school. However, some of them think that school uniforms are old-fashioned and ugly to wear. In my opinion, I strongly agree that students should be compulsory to wear school uniforms.First of all, if the children wore their own clothes, there would be a big discrimination between the rich and the poor.  In fact, each student has their own family backgrounds, and for some kids, their parents may not be able to buy fancy clothes or even normal clothes for them because of their personal finances. Unlike the poor kids, the rich kids can afford luxurious brands like Louis Vuitton or Gucci. So, when these two kids met, there would be a big discrimination between them. The poor kid may even get bullied by the rich. Clearly, when children wear their school uniforms, there will be no discrimination because they have identical clothes.Second of all, school uniforms make life easier. Imagine when you wake up and realize that you are late for school you then get up, brush your teeth, wash your face and here are two options: you can either mix all of your own clothes to get the one that you like or you can just wear uniforms. Of course, you will choose the second option because it will be much more efficient than you choose to mix your clothes. And it is even save you a lot of time too.In conclusion, I strongly agree that students should be made to wear uniforms.

AlpheccaStars · Accepted Answer

Tr?n Hà Chi To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It is good to know a good handful of adverbs of extent because this is a very common prompt in IELTS Task 2 essays. Complete agreement / disagreement:
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completely
fully
totally
wholeheartedly
unreservedly
with no reservations
without reservation
unequivocally
unquestionably
with no hesitation
unconditionally

Next, you wrote 255 words. You should write 270-300 words for task 2. You run the risk of writing less than the minimum.

Give a personal example.

For example:

When I was in grade 7, I had a friend Binh, who was from a very poor family. Her clothes were old ones handed down from her older sister, so she never had anything new to wear. She was very depressed and unhappy, and did not perform well on her exams. If the school had given poor children uniforms and required everyone to wear them, she would have been one of the top students in the class.

AlpheccaStars · Answer

In every country, students usually are made to wear uniforms at school. However, some of them think that school uniforms are old-fashioned and ugly. ~~to wear~~. In my opinion, I strongly agree that ~~students~~ it should be compulsory (wrong usage. Wearing uniforms is compulsory. It is wrong to write "Students are compulsory." ) for students to wear school uniforms.

First of all, if the children wore their own clothes, there would be a big difference ~~discrimination~~ (Wrong word. "Discrimination" is a negative word, where some are treated as inferior.) between the rich and the poor. In fact, each student has their own family backgrounds, (wrong form. One student has one family background.) and for some of them ~~kids~~, ("kid" is very informal. Avoid it in academic essays.) their parents may not be able to buy fancy clothes or even normal clothes ~~for them~~ because of their personal finances. Unlike the poor children ~~kids~~, the rich ones ~~kids~~ can afford luxurious brands like Louis Vuitton or Gucci. So, when these two ~~kids~~ met, there would be a big difference ~~discrimination~~ between them. The poor child may lose self esteem and feel inferior; they ~~kid~~ may even get bullied by the rich. Clearly, when children wear their school uniforms, there will be no discrimination because they have identical clothes.

Second ~~of all~~, school uniforms make life easier. Imagine when you wake up and realize that you are late for school you (You have mashed two sentences together.) then get up, brush your teeth, wash your face and here are two options: you can either go through ~~mix~~ all of your own clothes to get the outfit ~~one~~ that you like or you can just wear a uniform.s. Of course, you will choose the second option because it will be much more efficient than having to decide and pick what to wear. you choose to mix your clothes. (ungrammatical) And it is even saves you a lot of time too.

In conclusion, I strongly agree that students should be made to wear uniforms.

PLEASE HELP ME WITH MY ESSAY ABOUT SCHOOL UNIFORMS! THANK YOU!

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