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topicDiscuss both views and give your opinionSome people think that parents have the greatest influence on their child’s academic development, while others think that a child’s teacher had more influence.my essay:People have differing views about whether children’s educational growth are most influenced by their parents or teachers. In my opinion, both parties play complementary roles. On the one hand, parents are an integral part of a child’s educational journey. First, the degree of a parent’s financial support greatly impacts their children’s education. For instance, parents who are willing to invest in their child's education by sending them to high-quality schools, hiring tutors, or purchasing educational resources have a better chance of seeing their child achieve high academic performance.. Second, parents’ attitudes toward academics have a significant impact on their children’s study habits and academic performance. Through emphasizing the importance of education, maybe by asking about the children’s classes and helping them with homework, they can encourage their children to take their studies seriously. In contrast, children who have parents that do not show interest in their schooling tend to skip classes and do not do homework, and in some extreme cases, dropping out of school.On the other hand, teachers are equally important in a student’s scholastic development. When a teacher is knowledgeable in their subject matter and possesses the ability to present the lecture in a clear and understandable manner and provide regular assessment tests and constructive feedback, their students are able to grasp the material and retain it over time more easily and improve their learning capacity, hence improving their academic performance. Thus, a teacher’s knowledge and teaching ability exert a great impact on students’ scholastic growth. Additionally, students need a conducive learning environment in the classroom in order to stay focused on the lecture and effectively assimilate the information. That is certainly the duty of teachers. They can correct disruptive behaviors such as making loud noises or encourage students to actively participate in learning. This fosters a quiet, positive, and supportive atmosphere that can make it easier for students to understand and engage in the lecture. In conclusion, parents’ attitudes towards the importance of education and their willingness to invest in their children’s schooling, along with teachers’ professional expertise and their control over the classroom atmosphere, together shape a child’s academic journey. Respectively, both have equal influences on students’ scholastic outcomes.i always cannot find enough ideas for the agree or disagree essay while writing too long for the discuss both views essay. it is such a struggle.

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phoebe phoebeIn contrast, children who have parents that do not show interest in their schooling tend to skip classes and do not do homework, and in some extreme cases, dropping out of school.

That can be one reason among others.

phoebe phoebeAdditionally, students need a conducive learning environment in the classroom in order to stay focused on the lecture

The last word is not natural in a school context. It's used in British English in the context of university education. The word lessons would make more sense.

AlpheccaStars · Answer

phoebe phoebeSome people think that parents have the greatest influence on their child’s academic development, while others think that a child’s teacher had more influence.

There are two errors in the instructions. Be sure to copy them accurately.

AlpheccaStars · Answer

You wrote 360 words. The minimum is 250. You will not lose points for writing more; however, longer essays generally do not get high band scores. And there are many reasons for this.

First, the longer the essay, the more chances you have to make errors, and you will lose points for each of those errors.

Second, your writing may be repetitious and wordy. This will cost you points in task response or coherence and cohesion.

Third, you will likely stray off-topic, and examiners will deduct points if you are not focused on the topic. Do not write about things that are not specifically given in the task. You will also be tempted to use weak or unsound arguments or even lose your direction and contradict yourself. Develop just two or three argument points with examples and personal experiences. It is much better to have two well-developed and fleshed-out argument points than to have four which are just individual separate statements.

Fourth, you will spend a lot of time writing, and not have sufficient time left over to proofread your essay. You will miss the silly mistakes, which everyone makes, and that lowers your score.

Fifth, pity the examiners who have to read all the IELTS essays individually. There are hundreds of them. If they read your long essay when they are tired at the end of the day, they will score extra hard and not be very generous when scoring.

Sixth, you will not have enough time for Task 1, and get a lower score there. You should allow 40 minutes for task and 20 minutes for Task 1. The word counts are designed so that you have ample time for brainstorming and then writing the two parts.

Aim to write 270-300 words for Task 2. Practice writing a lot of essays so you get a feeling for the length.
You can use this word counter:

https://www.ieltsscore.com/word-counter/

AlpheccaStars · Answer

People have differing views about whether children’s educational growth are (wrong verb form) most influenced by their parents or teachers. In my opinion, both ~~parties~~ play complementary roles.

On the one hand, parents are an integral part of a child’s education. ~~al journey~~. ~~First, the degree of a parent’s financial support greatly impacts their children’s education~~. (Your writing is repetitive. ) ~~For instance,~~ Parents who are willing to invest in their child's education by sending them to high-quality schools, hiring tutors, or purchasing books and educational toys ~~educational resources~~ have a better chance of seeing their child achieve high academic performance.. Second, parents’ attitudes toward academics have a significant impact on their children’s study habits and ~~academic~~ performance. Through emphasizing the importance of education, maybe by asking about the children’s classes and helping them with homework, they can encourage their children to take their studies seriously. In contrast, children who have parents that do not show interest in their schooling tend to skip classes (That is more likely for teenagers, not primary school students. What age group are you writing about? "Lecture" means university. But "children" usually refers to primary school, ages 7-13. Don't parent read to their children and teach them extra lessons at home? Do parents give special rewards for good grades? ) and do not do homework, and in some extreme cases, dropping (wrong verb form) out of school.

On the other hand, teachers are equally important in a student’s scholastic development. When a teacher is knowledgeable in ~~their~~ the subject matter and possesses the ability to present the lessons ~~lecture~~ in a clear and understandable manner and provide regular assessment tests and constructive feedback, their students are able to grasp the material and retain it over time more easily ~~and improve their learning capacity~~, hence improving their academic performance. Thus, a teacher’s knowledge and teaching ability exert a great impact on students’ scholastic growth. Additionally, students need a conducive learning environment in the classroom in order to stay focused on the lecture ~~and effectively assimilate the information~~. That is certainly the duty of teachers. They can correct disruptive behaviors such as making loud noises or encourage students to actively participate in learning. This fosters a quiet, positive, and supportive atmosphere that can make it easier for students to understand and engage in the lecture.

In conclusion, parents’ attitudes towards the importance of education and their willingness to invest in their children’s schooling, along with teachers’ professional expertise and their control over the classroom atmosphere, together shape a child’s academic journey. Respectively, both have equal influences on students’ scholastic outcomes.

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