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The line graph illustrates the proportion of car possession in the UK over a course of 30 years starting from 1975.

Looking at the graph, it is evident that the UK experienced an upward trend in owning more than one car. Meanwhile, the percentage of using one car registered the highest figures in all four groups examined.

In 1975, the proportion of having three cars stood at merely 2%, which marked the lowest figure among the four. This figure increased significantly to approximately 10% by the end of studied period, in 2005. Witnessing the similar pattern, the percentage of owning two cars registered nearly 8% and was followed by a rise of 4% in the following thirty years.

The ownership of one car is the most popular in the UK, which was the highest figure among the four, equivalent to 45%. After that, there was a remarkable decline in having one car from 45% to 37% from 1975 to 1985, prior to increasing considerably to its initial level, at 45%. Similarly, the UK saw a dramatic drop in the proportion of no car ownership from 43% to more than 20% during the time frame, which indicated the improvement of living standard.

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The line graph illustrates (wrong word) the proportion of car possession (wrong expression) in the UK over a course of 30 years starting from 1975.

Model paragraph:

The line graph gives information about car ownership in the UK between 1975 and 2005. Specifically, it plots four curves: the percentages of the households that owned one car, two cars, three cars and no cars.

~~Looking at the graph~~, (Those words do not describe the data. The reader knows what you are looking at.) ~~it is evident that~~ (The words "clear, evident, apparent, obvious, and notable" are opinion words. Just describe the data.) the UK experienced (wrong word. People have experiences. Countries do not.) There was an upward trend in the percentages of households owning more than one car. Meanwhile, the percentage of those having ~~using~~ one car was ~~registered~~ the highest of ~~figures~~ in all four groups examined. (You have not told the reader about these ownership groups. You must do this in the first paragraph.)

In paragraph #2 give the reader the most important observations. Here are some ideas.

1. The prevalence of car ownership increased over the period. The proportion of those without a car was cut in half, from 44 to 22 percent and most of that decline happened in the first ten years.

2. The group of single-car households was consistently the largest, ranging between 37 and 45 percent. It was followed by the group with no cars, and then the group with two cars. The rank order of the four groups did not change.

3. The highest relative gain was in the households with three cars. It increased by a factor of five, but it was always the smallest group, with a maximum value of 9% at the end of the thirty-year period.

In 1975, the proportion of having (wrong expression - the proportion of households having...) three cars stood at merely 2%, which marked the lowest value ~~figure~~ (In a math/science context, a figure is a graph or diagram that is inserted into the text. The figure here is the graph, its title and legend. ) among the four. This ~~figure~~ increased significantly to approximately 10% by the end of the ~~studied~~ period, in 2005. Witnessing the similar pattern, the percentage of owning two cars registered nearly 8% and was followed by a rise of 4% in the following thirty years.

The ownership of one car is the most popular in the UK, which was the highest figure among the four, equivalent to 45%. After that, there was a remarkable decline in having one car from 45% to 37% from 1975 to 1985, prior to increasing ~~considerably~~ to its initial level, at 45%. Similarly, the UK saw (wrong word. Countries cannot see things. ) a dramatic drop in the proportion of no car ownership from 43% to more than 20% during the time frame, which indicated the improvement of living standard. (Do not write opinions or draw conclusions in Task 1. Just describe the data.)

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