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You eat at your college cafeteria every lunchtime. However, you think it needs some improvements. Write a letter to the college magazine. In your letter:

• explain what you like about the cafeteria
• say what is wrong
• suggest how it could be improved

Begin your letter as follows: Dear Sir / Madam

You should write at least 150 words. You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.
(Question taken from Instant IELTS by Guy Brook-Hart)

Dear sir or Madam,

I have been a permanent customer of the cafeteria since my first day in the College. I am writing to suggest some ideas which I think will greatly improve the service at the college cafeteria.

First of all, I would like to thank all the staff of the cafeteria for their service. I have to admit that staff is very friendly and the cafeteria is spotlessly clean. Moreover, the meal is very delicious and there are menus even for Muslim students and vegetarians.

Unfortunately, there are some shortfalls such as it is always very crowded and noisy as the spe of the cafeteria is very cramped. Consequently, there are not enough tables for all students during lunchtime and therefore there are queues waiting their turn to sit at the tables and have lunch.

For instance , I myself had to wait in a queue for an hour a lot of times and as a result I was late for my Maths lessons.

I have read in a college newspaper that in July the administration of the college decided to make repairs in the first floor. I carried out a convey among my classmates and 99 percent of students would like not to wait for their lunch. On behalf of my classmates I am asking you to enlarge the cafeteria in order to make it more spacious.

Thank you for your understanding and cooperation.

Yours faithfully,

Bret Pitt