Please, help me with making my motivation letter sound better.

0 Hey! Please, I would be so happy if you helped me with correcting my motivation letter. I'm waiting for any kind of critics.02br
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00Also, I have to shorten it, but don't know how.02br
00Thanks a lot in advance.02br
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00My name is Kelly Bundy, I was born in 1988, in Skuodas, Lithuania, the city where I have always lived. Now I am 18 years old and I am just finishing my school.02br
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00I don’t have much work experience but the previous summer I worked as a waiter in a small but luxurious restaurant. I found it very important to be an intelligent person who speaks English fluently. This experience helped me to understand the taste of job and the real value of money. I said to myself that I must study hard and get a well-accepted diploma that will help me to reach my goals. I have been thinking about my bachelor studies a lot. At first I could not choose any university that would justify my wishes. But then I came accross to get some information about [Name Of the University]. It seemed an attractive opportunity to get a well preferred European education and to live not far away from home. I think that it is highly essential to be a sensible and well-rounded person and to have a well-accepted education. I am anxious about my future. Last year I studied at the Young Businessemen School for the 9th-11th grade students. This experience helped me to make up my mind about my future plans. I am determined to complete studies in economics and business and get bachelor and also master degrees. I want to start my own business or work for another company using the knowledge that your school can provide.02br
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00Education is highly valued in my family. My mother works as a deputy head at a high school and my father is a man of science. He is a professor at the [Name Of the University] and works for an international company too. He is never satisfied with his achievements, he says he can do better. I have an older brother who now is reaching for his master degree in computer science. All of them are hard-working. They have always encouraged me to do my best and have treated me as an obstinate, reliable and sincere person. I can be managing and friendly at the same time. Some time ago I attended a drama studio and found myself as a creative cheerful and socializing person who prefers people that can really be trusted. Since then I have liked all the preparations for the city events as well as for shows at school although it requires lots of organizing skills. So friends say that I should run my own business in the future. I believe in fortune and hope to make a successful career. That is why I decided to graduate The Young Businessemen School. Sometimes in my free time I practice my English reading skills by reading books and chatting on the internet with people from English-speaking countries though I like socialising with my friends I have had since my childhood most of all. I know that I have many things to learn. I have a purpose to graduate this indispensable bachelor programme in economics and business. Now I am trying to reach this aim.02br
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00My relatives have always said I have certain leadership qualities as I always try to be better than the rest. They say I have high goals in life. I see myself to have critical as well as strategic mind. I am sure I am able to complete all the tasks I will be given. 0-