Please Help Me With IELTS Writing Task 1.

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The graph below shows the amounts of waste produced by 3 companies over a period of 15 years.

The illustrated line graph depicted the total number of garbage in tones thrown out by three corporations over the course of 15 years.

Overall, company A and B’s amounts of trash were to be cut down while that of company C demonstrated an upward trend.

As for company A and B, both of which the amounts of trash stood at approximately 9 and 12 tones in 2000, much more than that of company C. Company A’s number of garbage were reduced steadily over 15 years (at about 9 tones in 2015). On the contrary, the number of garbage of company B increased during the first 5 years and afterwards, similar to company A, it decreased in a swift fashion, with the production of only 3 tones in 2015.

Company C’s number of waste, however, started at just above 3 tones in 2000, then showed a gradual rise to about 7 tones in 2010 and plummeted to 11 tones at the end of the period

AlpheccaStars · Accepted Answer

The ~~illustrated~~ line graph depicted (Wrong tense. The line graph exists in the present time.) the total number of garbage (Garbage is non-count. You cannot count garbage in numbers. Number of garbage is ungrammatical English.) in tones (You consistently misspell this word.) ~~thrown out~~ produced by three corporations over the course of 15 years. (Which 15 years? 1800-1815?? 1940-1955? You need to be very precise and specific in Task 1 essays. )

The line graph plots the tonnage of waste material generated by three different companies, A, B and C, as a function of time from 2000-2015. The range of the data is from 3 to 12 tonnes.

Overall, company A and B’s amounts of trash were to be (wrong tense) cut down (We cut down trees. We can cut down on the amount of food we eat.) while that of company C had ~~demonstrated~~ an upward trend.

As for company A and B, both of which the amounts of trash stood at approximately (awkward.) 9 and 12 tones in 2000, much more than that of company C. Company A’s number of garbage were reduced steadily over 15 years (at about 9 tones in 2015). On the contrary, the number of garbage of company B increased during the first 5 years and afterwards, similar to company A, it decreased in a swift (Be specific. What does "swift" mean, in numerical terms?) fashion, with the production of only 3 tones in 2015.

Company C’s number of waste, however, started at just above 3 tones in 2000, then showed a gradual rise to about 7 tones in 2010 and plummeted to 11 tones at the end of the period (missing punctuation.)

Suggestion for the body paragraphs.

The total amount of waste produced by the three companies (A, B and C) started at 24 tonnes in 2000 (12, 8 and 4, respectively) and ended about 12% less, or 21 tonnes (8, 3 and 10, respectively) in 2015. It reached a peak value at 27 tonnes (11, 10 and 6, respectively) in 2005. The contributions to the total by each company had very different patterns over the period.

The amount of waste produced by Company A decreased nearly linearly at a rate of 0.25 tonnes/year over the 15 year period, starting at a value of 12 tonnes in 2000 and decreasing to about 8 in 2015. It was the highest waste producer in 2000 when it generated half of the total waste of all three companies. That proportion declined to less than 40% at the end of the period, when it ended in second place. On the other hand, Company C increased its waste production nearly linearly at a rate of 0.4 tonnes/year. It started at 4 tonnes in 2000 (only 1/8 of the total from all three companies) and ended at 10 tonnes in 2015, nearly half of the total. Company C surpassed Company B in 2010, when both companies generated 7 tonnes, and passed Company A in 2013, when both companies were creating between 8 and 9 tonnes of waste. Company B's trend in its amount waste production can be divided into two time periods. The trend was upward in the first five years, increasing by 25% from 8 to 10 tonnes. In 2005, the trend reversed and there was a decline at a rate of 0.7 tonnes/year, from 10 tonnes to 3 tonnes in 2015.

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