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Some people think that being born to a poor country is a bad luck while others believe that it only helps fuel one’s aspirations to succeed. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Many people think that it is unlucky when they born in a third country. While I accept that this may suit many people, I believe that others have lots of inspiration to be successful.

On the one hand, there a variety reasons that why it is unfortunate to grow in a developing country. One reason is the situation of society is not secure. For example, there is not enough job for almost people, so they break the law to earn money to meet their basic human needs. Furthermore, citizens in this country do not care about education. There are a few schools and almost children do not suggest to go to school because their parents are not able to pay the fees.

On the other hand, other people have some reasons to think differently. Firstly, there are lots of funds to support inhabitants from their government or developed countries in many respects of the life. For instance, scholarship is an opportunity to help students go abroad to learn the advanced education. Secondly, contributing to the community is also a reason. The poor have a strong motivation to improve their life. They will try hard to find suitable jobs to earn money, improve the standard of living and this help society more develop.

In conclusion, it is certainly true that growing in poor country can be not lucky for many people, but this can provide them with inspiration to make their life better.