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Hungry Posted 19 years ago
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Please help me very urgetly. I have only 3 hrs left to submit it.

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00I am applying for BBA-Finance in a university. They have asked me to write an essay on why I want to pursue the program. I've written it, but I feel that it doesn't sparkle. I am 00not sure if grammar, sentence structure, flow, punctuation, mood and tense are presented in a manner that makes sense. Could you please please go through the essay for inconsistencies, and make sure that the flow of readablity is correct, and the style is consistent???02br
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01font01b00Why I want to pursue BBA in finance.02b02font02br
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01b00There’s an old saying in English;02br
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00It’s been my habit that before getting involved with any job I ask myself two questions: What sort of person am I? and What sort of job would I be happy in? I am lucky to be born with a business mind, although I don’t have a huge family background in this field. Since my days in elementary school, I have been interested in doing BBA in finance. If someone asks me why I want to pursue BBA in finance, I would like to say that I want to be a financial planner and analyst. 02br
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00I’ve always assisted my mother with the analysis of home budget and managing household outlays. Through my own academic experience, I started to be aware of the professional goal in financial planning and analysis. Specifically, I would like to be a financial manager who is working for an international organization. I would focus on 01font00corporate financial management and the investment decision-making process. In addition, I am interested in accounting and taxation, since I’ve been convinced of their benefits in finance. 02font00My academic experience and interest would compel me to be a financial planner and analyst. Particularly, I expect that I can develop myself to be a professional financial manager. To reach the professional goals, I know I will have to bend over backwards to gain short-term objectives such as taking a deep understanding of financial theory, planning and analysis and improving my ability to think more strategically. 02br
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00In the end, I feel that if the take up a course in finance, I will have lots of opportunities coming my way offering a bright career. 02br
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0What does the saying about knowing what side the bread is buttered on have to do with your aspirations? That is totally lost on me. 02br 02br 01b 00I’ve always assisted my mother with the analysis of home budget and managing household outlays.

  • 0What does the saying about knowing what side the bread is buttered on have to do with your aspirations?
  • That is totally lost on me.
  • 02br 02br 01b 00I’ve always assisted my mother with the analysis of home budget and managing household outlays.
  • 02br 02br 01b 00Through my 01del 00own 02del 00academic experience, I became more aware of the fields of financial planning and analysis.
  • Specifically, I would like to be a financial manager in an international organization.
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0What does the saying about knowing what side the bread is buttered on have to do with your aspirations? That is totally lost on me. 02br
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00I would omit the entire beginning, and start with "Literally, since I was in elementary school, I have been interested in pursuing a degree in finance, and more recently, I have narrowed my goal to become a financial planner and anal
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0Dear GG,02br
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00So many thanks for helping me. It's so thoughtful of you.02br
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01i00Literally, since I was in elementary school, I have been interested in pursuing a degree in finance, and more recently, I have narrowed my goal to become a financial planner and analyst. 02i01b00I’ve always assisted my mother with the anal

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