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In recent years, the life in the metropolises around the world have been becoming more harder than it was in the past. Problems for people who are living in such large city are varied. This essay will analyze these problems and I strongly believe that relocating to places which lower the density of population should be promoted by the government.

There are two main issues that citizens who chose to live in advanced cities have to solve on a daily basis. First, the fierce competitions in job market could produce a amount of stress. In globalized and revolutionized age, international enterprises have started to invest in the developing countries, especially in the financial centers, so that thousands of low-skilled jobs might be cut off. Hence this leads to the increasing rate of criminals and poverty. Second, the cost of living in big cites are always higher than the others. The fact shows that a amount of money spends for the necessity of life such as food, education. This heavy financial burden causes repercussions which city residents is to hardly be coped.

After these problems was expressed above, from my personal perspective, I think that governments should take this responsibility to relieve the burden of population in large cities. Creating more job opportunities in less attractive places should be prioritized. Binh Duong Province, for instance, authorities establish some news policies as subsidy for start-up companies and build new industrial zones which secure the stability of society. Furthermore, living in such areas could save a great deal of money for low-income households because reasonable prices from stores or markets could be available with equality in qualities.

In conclusion, it is true that living in the large cities have both advantages and disadvantages. I think governments should be the vanguards to conduct some measure to attract more people to choose to live in rural areas.