Please help me to review my IELTS task 2!!! Thank you!!!

Topic: Some people have benefited from modern communications technology. But some people have not benefited from it at all. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

The development of new communication methods, especially communication wireless and sophisticated devices has improved human’ life for a while. But some opposers argue that after all, they do not have any advantage from current telecommunications. I believe that technology was invested to serve human if we know how to use it right way.

In the one hand, the novel devices and telecommunications has become increasingly popular in digital era, where we can access to new information, become more well-informed and could connect with each other wherever, even because of those technologies, gap between rural areas and urban areas is narrowed. Needless to say, a thousand of students have approached global knowledge only with double clicks despite of having geographical distance. Besides that, high-quality labors, who are disabled can work at home but they still ensure job performance. Telecommunications has solved shortage labor crisis in 20^th century, which is huge problem of every country nowadays.

However, media and communication device has developed in leaps and bounds, which leads to indifference in various relationship in modern life. With the development of Internet, people spend almost their time for virtual world and relationships on social networks. A concrete example is a new disease of 21th century, addicted to social networks, which has appeared follow a development of communication technology. According to the report of sociologists , the rate of people, who have to log in website such as Facebook , Twitter… over 13 hour per day to connect to others and create for themselves a dream virtual life instead going outside and make a real relationships is upsurge in the last 2 years.

Taking all above mentioned facts into account, the current development of new technologies could be either benefited or not. In my opinion, it will bring for human a huge advantage if we could understand its basic core.