0
Anonymous Posted 18 years ago
Essay & Composition Writing
Please help me to proofread and give suggestion to my incomplete essay
Topic : The difficulties older people face nowadays
To express my views on the plight of the elderly in Hong Kong,we must firstly find out the reasons causing this phenomena.The reasons are very straight-forward and simple to cope with.They are the lack of filial piety resulting in the physical abuse of old people by family members , the poor suppliment of welfare leads to the elder beggar to be found everywhere and the shortage of compassion to our older generation.
Meanwhile,the plight of those who are facing gets much aggrevattion owing to the government doing nothing for addressing the problem thereby aggrevates the problem much serious.
Therefore,some of them are raising money by selling the collected newspapers and working in a low wage given .Should the educated generation assist them?Should the government provide more welfare to them?Should their son or grandson bring up their relatives?
If our morden citicizens only regard to rectify the problem of economic tsunami but not more for the problem of aging population,the society will like a evil base that is only know earning the capital.
To be continued.
Thank you for your reading.
Please inform me that what problems and grammatical mistakes existed.Thank you.
To express my views on the plight of the elderly in Hong Kong,we must firstly find out the reasons causing this phenomena.The reasons are very straight-forward and simple to cope with.They are the lack of filial piety resulting in the physical abuse of old people by family members , the poor suppliment of welfare leads to the elder beggar to be found everywhere and the shortage of compassion to our older generation.
Meanwhile,the plight of those who are facing gets much aggrevattion owing to the government doing nothing for addressing the problem thereby aggrevates the problem much serious.
Therefore,some of them are raising money by selling the collected newspapers and working in a low wage given .Should the educated generation assist them?Should the government provide more welfare to them?Should their son or grandson bring up their relatives?
If our morden citicizens only regard to rectify the problem of economic tsunami but not more for the problem of aging population,the society will like a evil base that is only know earning the capital.
To be continued.
Thank you for your reading.
Please inform me that what problems and grammatical mistakes existed.Thank you.
Top answer
Highlighted things you need to fix. Is this for A-level or HKCEE? They are the lack of filial piety resulting in the physical abuse of old people by family members , the poor suppliment of welfare leads to the elder begga r to be found everywhere and the shortage of compassion to our older generation.
- Highlighted things you need to fix.
- Is this for A-level or HKCEE?
- They are the lack of filial piety resulting in the physical abuse of old people by family members , the poor suppliment of welfare leads to the elder begga r to be found everywhere and the shortage of compassion to our older generation.
- Meanwhile, the plight of those who are facing gets much aggrevattion owing to the government doing nothing for addressing the problem thereby aggrevates the problem much serious.
- Should their son or grandson bring up their relatives?
Get the Weekly English Kit 📬
New words, one handy idiom, and a 2-minute quiz — delivered to your inbox to keep your streak alive.
3 Answers
0
Highlighted things you need to fix. Is this for A-level or HKCEE?
(Also, try to focus on one point per paragraph.)
To express my views on the plight of the elderly in Hong Kong,we must firstly find out the reasons causing this phenomena.The reasons are very straight-forward and simple to cope with.They are the lack of filial piety resulting in the ph
(Also, try to focus on one point per paragraph.)
To express my views on the plight of the elderly in Hong Kong,we must firstly find out the reasons causing this phenomena.The reasons are very straight-forward and simple to cope with.They are the lack of filial piety resulting in the ph
00
Yes.It is a part of HKAL UE curriculum.
L am too obliged to your heartly marking.
What do you feel of my imcomplete essay?HeHee!!
L am too obliged to your heartly marking.
What do you feel of my imcomplete essay?HeHee!!
00
AnonymousWhat do you feel of my imcomplete essay?HeHee!!
If you post the whole essay, I'll give you more comments.
0
Related Questions