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Janekorean Posted 14 years ago
Essay & Composition Writing
Please help me to have a good enough Motivation letter.
Bern University of Applied Sciences
22 Jan 2012
Dear Sir or Madam
I am applying to your International Program of Bachelor Degree in Business Administration at the Bern University of Applied Sciences starting in September 2012.
I have a Bachelor degree of Information and Communication Technology. Now I want to continue my career in Business field. Since I was in high school I’ve been helping my family business and work in Hotel during the summer since I was in 1st year of my university, at the moment I have been working at one of the ...’s biggest bank for 5 months, these experiences have been giving me so much passion in Business field specially in Banking field also I’ve been learning so much things about money from my 14, such as how to manage the money I have today and how to allocate them.
For about my hobby and things to do in my spare time, I am a lover of sport, music, book, foreign languages and many other things like others, specially table tennis, basket ball and playing guitar. I spend certain times on my interest. So I got the fruit of them somewhat. When I was freshman in university I got 1st place in table tennis annual match of our university and in second year I got 2nd place. The other great memory of my university life is I was a member of the top basketball team of my university. So I know the effect of team player and a solo player.
I also do believe in helping others is human being’s most important responsibility. That’s why I always try to help others catch as catch can. In order to obtain my this eagerness, I’ve been working as a English tutor in high school, movement challenge people and some of my colleagues at the bank. Seeing their happiness of learning new things always gives me strength and shows me the meaning of life.
I really want to study at Bern University of Applied science because of your very good educational system, multilingual programs, and focus on gathering relevant work experience, very kind, helpful staff, and excellent facilities. I visited my friend in Switzerland last summer when I was travelling around the Europe and I was lucky to have an exciting opportunity to make appointment with one of your staff works at international relations office and met her, she gave me detailed information about BUAS and how to apply for the program, because when I was studying in Poland last year I was interested in some universities in Europe and did research about them, compare them and I chose your university then I am very sure with my choice.
I am fully sure that to start my career and to pursue my ambitions and dreams from your university is one of the best choices of my life.
Thank you for your consideration. Look forward to your acceptance.
Sincerely yours,
Jane
22 Jan 2012
Dear Sir or Madam
I am applying to your International Program of Bachelor Degree in Business Administration at the Bern University of Applied Sciences starting in September 2012.
I have a Bachelor degree of Information and Communication Technology. Now I want to continue my career in Business field. Since I was in high school I’ve been helping my family business and work in Hotel during the summer since I was in 1st year of my university, at the moment I have been working at one of the ...’s biggest bank for 5 months, these experiences have been giving me so much passion in Business field specially in Banking field also I’ve been learning so much things about money from my 14, such as how to manage the money I have today and how to allocate them.
For about my hobby and things to do in my spare time, I am a lover of sport, music, book, foreign languages and many other things like others, specially table tennis, basket ball and playing guitar. I spend certain times on my interest. So I got the fruit of them somewhat. When I was freshman in university I got 1st place in table tennis annual match of our university and in second year I got 2nd place. The other great memory of my university life is I was a member of the top basketball team of my university. So I know the effect of team player and a solo player.
I also do believe in helping others is human being’s most important responsibility. That’s why I always try to help others catch as catch can. In order to obtain my this eagerness, I’ve been working as a English tutor in high school, movement challenge people and some of my colleagues at the bank. Seeing their happiness of learning new things always gives me strength and shows me the meaning of life.
I really want to study at Bern University of Applied science because of your very good educational system, multilingual programs, and focus on gathering relevant work experience, very kind, helpful staff, and excellent facilities. I visited my friend in Switzerland last summer when I was travelling around the Europe and I was lucky to have an exciting opportunity to make appointment with one of your staff works at international relations office and met her, she gave me detailed information about BUAS and how to apply for the program, because when I was studying in Poland last year I was interested in some universities in Europe and did research about them, compare them and I chose your university then I am very sure with my choice.
I am fully sure that to start my career and to pursue my ambitions and dreams from your university is one of the best choices of my life.
Thank you for your consideration. Look forward to your acceptance.
Sincerely yours,
Jane
Top answer
Hi Jane, I am going to give you my standard answer, which should help you to begin to rewrite your letter. Some quick tips: 1) Don't use contractions. " 2) For numbers less than ten, write them out.
- Hi Jane, I am going to give you my standard answer, which should help you to begin to rewrite your letter.
- Some quick tips: 1) Don't use contractions.
- " 2) For numbers less than ten, write them out.
- 3) Try to avoid adjectives and adverbs.
- " 5) Don't tell stories.
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Hi Jane,
I am going to give you my standard answer, which should help you to begin to rewrite your letter. Some quick tips:
1) Don't use contractions. Instead, write "Do not use contractions."
2) For numbers less than ten, write them out.
3) Try to avoid adjectives and adverbs.
4) Avoid colloquial speech such as "I really want to study at Bern..." Just write, "My reas
I am going to give you my standard answer, which should help you to begin to rewrite your letter. Some quick tips:
1) Don't use contractions. Instead, write "Do not use contractions."
2) For numbers less than ten, write them out.
3) Try to avoid adjectives and adverbs.
4) Avoid colloquial speech such as "I really want to study at Bern..." Just write, "My reas
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Thank you Mountain Hiker, i'll follow your advice and be back with better one.
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I am back with this.Would you please review it?
Bern University of Applied Sciences
2012 Jan
Dear Sir or Madam
I am applying for the International Program of Bachelor degree in Bern University of Applied Sciences for the fall of 2012.
I graduated with a Bachelor degree in Information and Communication technology in spring of 2010, and I aim to continue my study in bus
Bern University of Applied Sciences
2012 Jan
Dear Sir or Madam
I am applying for the International Program of Bachelor degree in Bern University of Applied Sciences for the fall of 2012.
I graduated with a Bachelor degree in Information and Communication technology in spring of 2010, and I aim to continue my study in bus
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