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Anonymous Posted 19 years ago
Essay & Composition Writing
PLEASE HELP ME TO EDIT THIS MOTIVATION LETTER!! THANKS
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00 My name is ____. 00 00 I am ___ years old. 00 00 I graduated from University of 01 i 00 ____ 02 i 00 , majored in Economies. 00 00 I am currently working as a Personal Banking Representative. My current job requires excellent analytical, problem solving skills, organizational skills, as well as strong interpersonal communication skills. 00 00 I believe my academic background, work experience and independency will allow me to 00 be a success candidate for the Working Holiday Visa. 00 00 02 br
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00 Under the influence of my father who can speak basic Japanese, I have always been interested in Japanese language and culture since I was little. I also subsequently developed my interest in the Japanese pop music, Japanese dramas, animation, cartoon and more. 00 00 I 00 have 00 been studied Japanese on my own, and also took 00 J 00 apanese 00 l 00 anguage 00 cl 00 asses. 00 00 00 As a personal banking representative at the Telephone Banking centre, it gives me the opportunity to talk to people from all around the world and encourage myself for wanting to take time off from work to explore our “Global Village”. 02 br
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00 I recently met many wonderful Japanese friends for Language Exchange purpose. 00 00 The more I 00 get to 00 know about Japan 00 /Japanese culture 00 , the more I want to be there to experience and understand the culture and daily life 00 firsthand 00 in the beautiful cherry blooms season. 00 00 I am intending to stay in 00 , 00 and 00 to experience the differences between 00 the 00 urban and historical cities of 01 02 00 . 00 00 00 Furthermore 00 in order to improve my 00 Japanese language 00 and communication 00 skills 00 , 00 I am planning to register for a short-term (1 month) intensive Japanese language class while I am there 00 as well 00 . 02 br
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00 your sincere, 02 br
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00 My name is ____. 00 00 I am ___ years old. 00 00 I graduated from University of 01 i 00 ____ 02 i 00 , majored in Economies. 00 00 I am currently working as a Personal Banking Representative. My current job requires excellent analytical, problem solving skills, organizational skills, as well as strong interpersonal communication skills. 00 00 I believe my academic background, work experience and independency will allow me to 00 be a success candidate for the Working Holiday Visa. 00 00 02 br
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00 Under the influence of my father who can speak basic Japanese, I have always been interested in Japanese language and culture since I was little. I also subsequently developed my interest in the Japanese pop music, Japanese dramas, animation, cartoon and more. 00 00 I 00 have 00 been studied Japanese on my own, and also took 00 J 00 apanese 00 l 00 anguage 00 cl 00 asses. 00 00 00 As a personal banking representative at the Telephone Banking centre, it gives me the opportunity to talk to people from all around the world and encourage myself for wanting to take time off from work to explore our “Global Village”. 02 br
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00 I recently met many wonderful Japanese friends for Language Exchange purpose. 00 00 The more I 00 get to 00 know about Japan 00 /Japanese culture 00 , the more I want to be there to experience and understand the culture and daily life 00 firsthand 00 in the beautiful cherry blooms season. 00 00 I am intending to stay in 00 , 00 and 00 to experience the differences between 00 the 00 urban and historical cities of 01 02 00 . 00 00 00 Furthermore 00 in order to improve my 00 Japanese language 00 and communication 00 skills 00 , 00 I am planning to register for a short-term (1 month) intensive Japanese language class while I am there 00 as well 00 . 02 br
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00 your sincere, 02 br
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0 Just the glaring errors. 02 br 02 br 00 FYI: When I first read the part about your qualifications, I thought you were applying for a job or something. e.
- 0 Just the glaring errors.
- 02 br 02 br 00 FYI: When I first read the part about your qualifications, I thought you were applying for a job or something.
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- 10 10 12 br 12 br 10 Under the influence of my father who can speak basic Japanese, I have always been interested in Japanese language and culture since I was little.
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0 Just the glaring errors. 02 br
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00 FYI: When I first read the part about your qualifications, I thought you were applying for a job or something. What do your skills (i.e. organizational skills, etc.) have to do with your application for a visa? 01 blockquote
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00 FYI: When I first read the part about your qualifications, I thought you were applying for a job or something. What do your skills (i.e. organizational skills, etc.) have to do with your application for a visa? 01 blockquote
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