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Majmaj Posted 16 years ago
Letter Writing
Please help me to edit my statement latter.
My name is John and I am running for the Academic Senate. I'm excited to offer my work experience and talents to help our University adequately plan for the challenges of future growth. I hope to have the opportunity to serve my fellow students .I want to continue taking an active role in the ongoing improvement of our University's educational system.
I have graduated with a Master degree in Vocational Education and Training in 2009. I am currently in my First year as a PhD student in the faculty of education.
I have held positions of leadership in the past and I feel I work well with others. I have been working in a rehabilitation hospital since 2000 when I was hired as Vocational education counselor and my role was providing an education and training programs for people in order to find a better job. I have an experience in organizing a free workshops in deferent fields funded by a privet companies "as a marketing for them".
My general philosophy is "show each other, learn from each other, work with each other, and care for each other."
Together we can improve and maximize the use of our University systems.
I would appreciate your vote for me, John, to serve you as an Academic Senate.
I have graduated with a Master degree in Vocational Education and Training in 2009. I am currently in my First year as a PhD student in the faculty of education.
I have held positions of leadership in the past and I feel I work well with others. I have been working in a rehabilitation hospital since 2000 when I was hired as Vocational education counselor and my role was providing an education and training programs for people in order to find a better job. I have an experience in organizing a free workshops in deferent fields funded by a privet companies "as a marketing for them".
My general philosophy is "show each other, learn from each other, work with each other, and care for each other."
Together we can improve and maximize the use of our University systems.
I would appreciate your vote for me, John, to serve you as an Academic Senate.
Top answer
For a PhD candidate, there are a lot of mistakes. English is not your first language? I have underlined some problem areas: My name is John , and I am running for the Academic Senate.
- For a PhD candidate, there are a lot of mistakes.
- English is not your first language?
- I have underlined some problem areas: My name is John , and I am running for the Academic Senate.
- I'm excited to offer my work experience and talents to help our University adequately plan for the challenges of future growth.
- I want to continue taking an active role in the ongoing improvement of our University's educational system.
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For a PhD candidate, there are a lot of mistakes. English is not your first language? I have underlined some problem areas:
My name is John, and I am running for the Academic Senate. I'm excited to offer my work experience and talents to help our University adequately plan for the challenges of future growth. I hope to have the opportunity to serve my fellow
My name is John, and I am running for the Academic Senate. I'm excited to offer my work experience and talents to help our University adequately plan for the challenges of future growth. I hope to have the opportunity to serve my fellow
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Put some effort into fixing it yourself first; many are simple errors.
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Dear Micawber,
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My name is John and I am running for the Academic Senate. I'm excited to offer my work experience and talents to help our University adequately plan for the challenges of future growth. I hope to have the opportunity to serve my fellow students and to continue taking an active role in the ongoing improvement of our University’
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My name is John and I am running for the Academic Senate. I'm excited to offer my work experience and talents to help our University adequately plan for the challenges of future growth. I hope to have the opportunity to serve my fellow students and to continue taking an active role in the ongoing improvement of our University’
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You seem to have ignored the 2 corrections I did make, and you failed to change most of the underlined problems I indicated. I will give you a hint: all of these underlinings indicate mistakes in capitalization or punctuation. I have struck out awkward wordings.
My name is John, and I am running for the Academic Senate. I'm excited to offer my work experience and
My name is John, and I am running for the Academic Senate. I'm excited to offer my work experience and
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Dear Dear Micawber,
Please would you talk a final look at my writing, pleasse.
Thank you very much in advance,
My name is John and I am running for the Academic Senate. I'm excited to offer my work experience to help our University adequately plan for the challenges of future growth. I look forward to have the opportunity to serve my fellow students and to continue taking an active ro
Please would you talk a final look at my writing, pleasse.
Thank you very much in advance,
My name is John and I am running for the Academic Senate. I'm excited to offer my work experience to help our University adequately plan for the challenges of future growth. I look forward to have the opportunity to serve my fellow students and to continue taking an active ro
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My name is John and I am running for the Academic Senate. I'm excited to offer my work experience to help our university plan for the challenges of future growth. I look forward to the opportunity to serve my fellow students and to continue taking an active role in the improvement of our educational system.
I graduated with a master's degree in Vocational Education and Trai
I graduated with a master's degree in Vocational Education and Trai
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