Please help me to correct the paragraph about 'My dream house'

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My dream house is a house in grassland, I will stay there with my grandparents, my parents and my sister. It is medium house with two floors. There are ten rooms in my dream house, four bedrooms, a kitchen with dining area; two living rooms, one for downstair and one for upstair, and the house has two bathrooms, too. The last room, I will use it as a storehouse. There aren’t any animals because my father don’t like them at all. But it will have a small garden because all members in my family like planting. We will plant some decorative plants and flowers.

Enoon · Accepted Answer

My dream house is a house in grassland, I will stay there with my grandparents, my parents and my sister.

That is a run-on sentence, which means that there are two complete sentences in one. It is also a comma splice, because you have joined them with a comma. "In grassland" doesn't work here because it is too general.

My dream house is a house in the grasslands. I will stay there with my grandparents, my parents and my sister.

It is medium house with two floors.

There is a missing article, and "medium" needs a standard.

It is a medium-sized house with two floors.

There are ten rooms in my dream house, four bedrooms, a kitchen with dining area; two living rooms, one for downstair and one for upstair, and the house has two bathrooms, too.

The punctuation is inconsistent; a colon (or em dash) is called for to introduce the list, and semicolons separate all items in a list if any have internal commas. The items in a list must be the same syntactically

There are ten rooms in my dream house: four bedrooms; a kitchen with dining area; two living rooms, one for downstair and one for upstair; and two bathrooms, too.

The last room, I will use it as a storehouse.

We rarely anticipate the subject the way the French do. The coffee, he is hot. No. Your sentence can be a simple inversion, itself rather rare, but sophisticated.

The last room I will use as a storehouse.

There aren’t any animals because my father don’t like them at all.

Wrong conjugation. Your father doesn't like them, not "don't". You can't explain why there are no animals until we know there are no animals, so a comma is called for.

There aren’t any animals, because my father doesn’t like them at all.

But it will have a small garden because all members in my family like planting.

Do not begin a sentence with a conjunction unless you have a very good reason to. "All members in my family" is unidiomatic. "Planting" is the wrong word, at least in American English. A comma is called for as in the last part.

There aren’t any animals, because my father doesn’t like them at all, but it will have a small garden, because all the members of my family like gardening.

We will plant some decorative plants and flowers.

Good.

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Thanks a lot for your detalied explanation

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