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Shirley W Posted 17 years ago
Essay & Composition Writing
Please help me to correct my Essay! Thanks!
I love eating foods
I love eating foods. At my home, as long as there are some foods which I think it tastes well, I will eat all them up if my mother does not stop me in time. Although I remember that my parents took me to the hospital at midnight because I ate too much, I can’t wait for a good food for tomorrow.
The Mcdonald’s, KFC and pizza are my favourite foods, I think they are delicious, but my parents told me that they are junk foods. I know my parents don’t want me to become a fat girl, but I love eating the foods.
Although there are a lot of foods I like, there are foods I hate to eat, they are green peppers and some other vegetables, I think they are very bitter, but my parents told me they are healthy food, they want me eat more.
I love eating foods, but I hate green peppers.
I love eating foods. At my home, as long as there are some foods which I think it tastes well, I will eat all them up if my mother does not stop me in time. Although I remember that my parents took me to the hospital at midnight because I ate too much, I can’t wait for a good food for tomorrow.
The Mcdonald’s, KFC and pizza are my favourite foods, I think they are delicious, but my parents told me that they are junk foods. I know my parents don’t want me to become a fat girl, but I love eating the foods.
Although there are a lot of foods I like, there are foods I hate to eat, they are green peppers and some other vegetables, I think they are very bitter, but my parents told me they are healthy food, they want me eat more.
I love eating foods, but I hate green peppers.
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Dear teachers, Hi,my name is Shirley. I’m in my fourth year of primary school. I like leaning English.
- Dear teachers, Hi,my name is Shirley.
- I’m in my fourth year of primary school.
- I like leaning English.
- But I can’t write English very well.
- So, I ask you for help.
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Dear teachers,
Hi,my name is Shirley. I’m in my fourth year of primary school. I like leaning English. But I can’t write English very well. So, I ask you for help. Thank you very much!
Hi,my name is Shirley. I’m in my fourth year of primary school. I like leaning English. But I can’t write English very well. So, I ask you for help. Thank you very much!
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Dear teachers, could you kindly help her take a look of the essay? Since it's her first essay (though probably could not be called an essay yet), please do help!
Thank you very much!
Her father
Thank you very much!
Her father
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Hi, Shirley! I'm glad you like learning English so much. You have written a very nice essay -- keep up the good work! Here are a few comments for you:
I love eatingfoods.=
You can just say 'I love eating', and people will understand you mean food.
As long as there are some foods which I thinkit tastes well go
I love eating
You can just say 'I love eating', and people will understand you mean food.
As long as there are some foods which I think
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Dear Sagra,
Thank you for your kind help! I will rewrite my Essay according to your corrections. Hope I can improve my English quickly with your help! Thanks again!
Thank you for your kind help! I will rewrite my Essay according to your corrections. Hope I can improve my English quickly with your help! Thanks again!
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