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THE CHOICE

It is over now, the relationship between me and Tin - a Chinese man. It is still hurting me, but I know it was a right decision because of all the unwilling things that I had whenever I meet his family. The first reason that I felt uncomfortable to visit my ex boy friend's family was the language, second was the way they entertainment and above of all, I had to do most of the cooking and cleaning.

First of all, I was very embarrassing to be with Tin's family because they speak Mandarin most of the time and I do not understand any Mandarin. It scared me from the first time I met them. I was talking with Tin's Dad in English, where as his Mom and his sister talk something in Mandarin when they looked at me and laughed. After that time, I always have a feeling that they are going to talk something bad about me when they start their Mandarin. Second example is when his 2 years old niece came to play with me. I really liked to play with her, but I did not know what she wanted me to do because she did not know any English word except her name. As a certain result, she did not want to play with me again, and every member in his family thought that I was not interesting in children, but I really do like children in contrast.

Secondly, it was hard for me to get along with their entertainment ways. Whenever they get together, they used to divide into 2 groups: one is playing Chinese cards whereas the other group talking and watching Chinese movie. I could not join the second group, which included most of women and old family members, because of the language. However, the first group was also not my favorite either. It was the most boring cards I ever play. In addition, they used to screamed and yell at each other when one of them lost money from the game. I fell so left out from his family when Tin asked me to come over his house.

Moreover, I was very stressful when his family has some special occasions. He is the oldest son, and in Chinese couture, as a girl friend or as a wife of the oldest son, I had to be in charge of cooking for the parties. Depend on how big the parties were, but I usually have to repair for it a week ahead, and sometimes I had to cook some meal a day before. In his Mom last year birthday for example, I was very tired after cooking for about twenty people, but not only that, they also asked me to stay and help them for the clean up until midnight. After that experience, I knew that I never want to be his family's member for doing all of what I never like to do.

In the end, I wish I would not be Tin's girl friend because of all the acknowledges I had from his family. I was tired of trying to be friendly and understanding when I was with them. I was afraid of all the work I had to do for his big family. Now, I broke my heard because I lost my love, but I feel really release and without head age when I could get away from them, get away from doing of what I do not have a wish to do.