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Some people see that university education is essential for successful life, while others don’t find it true. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Whether or not tertiary education nowadays might be over-rated in human’s life is a bone of contention. Ingrained in this essay is the idea that studying college is a major driver in a range of ways to success. Following paragraphs will discuss both point of views.

First and foremost, it is often argued that going to college is beyond dispute good for everyone. The main reason lies on the fact that university helps students to shape their career path in a successful way, especially those who aren’t capable of building their own enterprise. It is my firm conviction that this opinion is indisputable right due to the development of present-day university education system, characterized by the burgeoning number of colleges, which have a close bond to various well-thought-on companies. Hence, only with having a college degree do graduates have a good job with high salary without exerting themselves more to find out high-quality companies for applying. Therefore, graduates are more likely to have a stable job after graduating in a hassle-free way.

On the other hand, many believe that investing time and long-lasting efforts in studying university is worthless. It might be since going to work early provides youngsters valuable experiences and wonderful life skills. I believe wholeheartedly that this point of view is vile, thus in college, there are a range of activities, which still have a competence for sharpening students’ soft skills well. The prime example is presentation and teamwork skills, which is conductive and challenging for teenagers to find a propitious environment to improve but for going to college. In addition, not only going to work early might not be a good stepping-stone, but also become a teething trouble on the path to success for adolescents. Indeed, not everyone has a firm stuff to embark on a career, thus without a college degree, incompetents and people with a frivolous career path will be trapped in a vicious circle of failures and unemployment.

In conclusion, instead of being on the line when getting a job straight after school, by studying university, teenagers have an edge to make a career and become fruitful due to interpersonal skills and vocational guidance studied in their university.