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Some people believe that we can use animals the way we want while others believe animals have rights and we must respect their rights. What is your opinion. Use specific reasons to support your point of view.

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Many people think that animals can be used whatever we want while I believe that everybody must respect and treat animals wells and no make them suffer in any way. I believe that animals have rights to live according to their natures without abused.

To serve luxury human life, people use some animals products which are expensive and rare. Fur coat, for example, comes from animals namely fox, honey badger, etc, which were caught by traps. The process of producing fur coat is really crime. This raises many ethical controversies from animal protectors.

Moreover, the exploitation of animals, especially endangered animals will lead to ecological crisis which affect human life. For instance, the practice of sharking is increasing every year. Sharks are harvested for meat, cartilage, liver oil and fins used in medical. The killing of many sharks will cause oceanic ecosystem out of balance by virtue of becoming too great in number of other creatures.

Human and animals live on this planet together and always have an important relationship. If we want animals respect us, we have to treat them the same way. If the utilization of animals products is halted, human will have motivation to generate more alternative materials in the future, as well as new cures in medical.

In conclusion, I believe that animals have rights to live happily without suffering and we must protect them under any circumstances.