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TOPIC HEALTH:

More and more people are suffering from health problems caused by a modern lifestyle which can not be treated with modern medicines. Some people think that a return to traditional medicine should be encouraged. To what extent do you agree?

MY ANSWER:

The contemporary was of living has negative impacts on everybody’s health, which can not be cured with current medication; therefore, some people think that conventional medicine ought to be restored. While this is faithful to some extent, I considered the new development of medicines saves millions of people in the world.

In fact, there are some disadvantages of modern lifestyle should be taken into consideration. Firstly, fast food is quite prevalent nowadays which is typically in high in cholesterol and calories yet offer little or no nutritional value. Science has proven that people who have the largest proportion of diet are fast food have higher risks of developing several chronic illnesses such as heart disease, diabetes, forms of cancer and obesity. Secondly, the wrong use of available high technology machines is also one of the tops of reasons. People are addicted to smartphones, tablets, but the lack of physical activities which lead to increase the risk of getting diseases. The modern medication cannot cure them unless they give up their detrimental lifestyles.

On the other hand, the latest medicines have saved millions of people every year. It is undoubtedly true that inventing vaccines and antibiotics enable people to prevent the fatal endemic diseases as well as bacterial infections. Moreover, they are effective in treating wounds and ulcers. For instance, if vaccines are not discovered, people will properly be succumbed by bird flu, rubella, etc. Another essential thing, the current medication strongly support doctors in saving the patients’ lives such as open-heart surgery, organ transplantation, etc.

For the above reasons, I believe that the current lifestyle has some adverse effects and the new medication cannot cure unless people change their lifestyles, I am also undeniable the usefulness of the latest medicines yet.