Please help me to check my essay in ielts writing task 2

Some people beieve that nowdays we have too many choices. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

These days, the industrial revilution increases people’s living standard. That is the reason why some people believe that a wide range of optins are being appeared. I completely agree with this idea for the following reasons.

Firstly, the creative methods to produce variety of population and its preservation have benifited human population. In fact, a large number of vegetables and fruits have been cultivated during the years thanks to the advanced technology. Therefore, manufactures may find it easy to contribute their food to customers. For example, my mother often overwhelms with non-sensonal fruits when she comes to supermarket to purchase. That means she has to take the quality and the need of products in consideration whenever she buys them.

Secondly, in terms of travelling, travel agencies provide hundred kinds of holidays or tourism services. In a detailed way, to travel from the distance place seems flexible with convinient transports. Furthermoree, the customers can readily receive the service no matter where they are. Take e booking tickets as an example. I reached a conclusion to go on holiday with my friends within 1 hour by getting all electronic tickets in the website of vietjetair.com. Consequently, if there are basic neccessities in our must-have lists, products of travelling are being existed to meet our demand

In conclusion, the development of the whole society serves our daily life largely in terms of traveling and food. It is advisable that making a decision