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Topic: Some people believe that school children should not be given homework by their teachers, whereas others argue that homework plays an important role in the education of children. Discuss both of these views and give your own opinion.

Answer:

People have different view about whether or not give homework to children. Although students spend almost their time on studying in school, I still believe that homework acts as a vital role in review what they learn.

There are several opinions against view that students are being forced to learn at home. The first obligation is that they do not have time to themselves. They stay in school whole day, if they have to do homework in evening, meaning that they are less likely to play, entertain and are difficult to develop their talents. The second is that leaning too much could perhaps lead to counter-productive consequences. For example, low learners are much difficult to understand and gain knowledge, they feel afraid to study so learning both in school and in home that make them stressful. If this situation last long time this cause negative mental effectiveness.

However these disadvantages mentioned above, I still believe that homework is necessary for a better educational system because doing homework is the best way to review what student learn in school. Students are likely to understand immediately knowledge is taught in class, however, this knowledge would be forgotten quickly if it is not reviewed and it is much hard to learn next lessons due to not remember and hold this knowledge in before units. Obviously, student fail to keep knowledge in their head that is a terrible fail of education so homework could be removed from educational systems.

In conclusion,homework is one of the most important educational measure and a part that could not lack in any learning and teaching process.