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Topic: Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members of society. Others, however, belive that school is the place to learn this.

Because of the different views of people in the society, there are a lot of problems having been made. One of them is the disagreement about how to educate our children to be good members of society. Some of them say that the responsibility of the issue is due to parents. In the other hand, others think the duty is placed in school which their children are following. In my opinion, there are some agreements and disagreements when discussing about this problem.

You can see that two statements mentioned in the previous paragraph are both right, but not enough. As you can know, in the developed society, one thing and the others are bonded together and placed in chains. Educating a child is not excepted from that. If you want the personality of your child developed in the positive way, you should not give all the duties to the education system in school. Being as their children, you should spend your time to know your child obviously. So that you and teachers could lead your child to walk on the right road, help them to develop their perception, skills and knowledge, or at least you could change and remove the negative thoughts from them.

Teaching children to be good members in society is one of the most hardships in your life. To do that, the association between parents and school is extremely important. If one of two factors were not effective, the children would not have a well train to be a good person.