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Thanh Lolita 23 Posted 7 years ago
Essay & Composition Writing

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Hello, I’m Thanh. I’m 20 years old and now I’m studying in University. I grown up in Hai Phong, of course, spent all my childhood in Hai phong. In 2017, I left my hometown and I’ve started study in Hanoi. Talking about Hanoi where a place have multicultural and behind the name have meaning of Viet Nam’s history. Hanoi is a capital of Viet Nam, it have 2 season: Wet season and dry season. In Hanoi have a plenty of heritage like: Hanoi old quarter, Temple of Literature; Hanoi Opera house; Independence Palace; Ho Chi Minh mausoleum and St Josey’s Cathedral. There are have too much love from tourist. Not also these places but only a lot of famous things you able to love with. Actually, I was not explored too much when I came to Hanoi, so that why for me. The best place that I’ve ever seen that absolutely The Old Quarter. My mom is a business in Ðong Xuan’s market and I remember to my childhood when I was a child, my mom has taken me up Hanoi and hanged out with me. The first place that my mom want to show me it’s the old quarter. I remembered that I have went along the street had name Hang Bong, then we’ve acrossed the market had name Dong Xuan. In front of us, it’s a crossroad and we’ve a taken the first on the left and we’ve went along the street and acrossed some stores and no longer we’ve come to the old quarter. I was very happy and looked up the big building in front of me and shake on my hands with my mom next to, I wish that moment could slow down. This is the best moment that I’ve ever been to. It’s huge and gorgeous. I’ve looked forward to that one day I might live into that town and I’ll invite my mom to live with me in my town. With the best memories, and the most beautiful experience I’m interested in going to Hanoi next time and every time my mom always a buddy for me, work as a fellow for me, sometimes I’ve said my mom that I would become a buddy for my mom one day but you know, I’ve worked not as well as my mom when she was buddy. Mom is the best. But. I always hope that someday, I’ll show her a lot of interesting in Hanoi, conclusion the worst side and the best side. I’m kidding! I love my mom, she is a sprirator for me to desire a dream that I can show her all of things in hanoi. I appreciate for my mom and thank her for making my dream. In Viet Nam, we also have a lot of foods. My mom love Pho which looks like noodles but more delicious and so do I. When I was a child, I used to eat noodles like Hao Hao, De Nhat,... in midnight cause I have love truly with, but now with increasing of many foods, I can not love only noodles but also the other foods. But you know, If you don’t want a further death, you should not eat them to much. Anyway, I love my hometown, completely love my mom and absolutely give all my heart for Hanoi. Thank for listening! Wish good health and good success. It took me 1 hour to write this essay cause I have not written English for 2 months that’s why recently I came back to practice my writing english and I’m not good at grammar, structure, sentence and vocabulary but I’ll learn from the failure so thank you for spending time for my essay

  

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Hi Thanh, Is this an assignment for a class, or just for yourself as practice? Are you going to give a presentation and speak to your class maybe? Usually, we would organise the information and limit or define the topic in some simple way.

— Nel0506

  • Hi Thanh, Is this an assignment for a class, or just for yourself as practice?
  • Are you going to give a presentation and speak to your class maybe?
  • Usually, we would organise the information and limit or define the topic in some simple way.
  • You wrote here about a lot of different things, but it's just not clear why.
  • You discuss your hometown and Hanoi and your memories of Hanoi as a child with your mom, and then your plans for the future if your mother comes to visit you.
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Hi Thanh,

Is this an assignment for a class, or just for yourself as practice?

Are you going to give a presentation and speak to your class maybe?

Usually, we would organise the information and limit or define the topic in some simple way. You wrote here about a lot of different things, but it's just not clear why.

You discuss your hometown and Hanoi and your memories

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Hi Thanh;

Have you learned about paragraphs yet?

Every essay must be divided into paragraphs. A paragraph has sentences related to one idea. Your essay will get very bad marks because you wrote only one paragraph.

There are many grammatical errors too.

You need to write paragraphs first. Then you can write essays.

Thanh Lolita 23I
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