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Topic: The pictures below show the process of making clothes from recycled plastic bottles.

The diagram illustrates the process of manufacturing clothes using recycled plastic bottles.

Overall, the production of clothes from recycled materials involves plastic bottles undergoing various phases in which they are collected, sanitized, and physically altered.

The first stage is when plastic bottles are collected and transported by truck to factories where they are sorted and then cut into small pieces in a specific funnel-shaped shredding machine. Subsequently, these particles are passed through an apparatus to be washed, after which they are placed in a container and sun-dried for 10 hours. After that, they are transferred to a cylindrical boiler to be melted down. Afterward, the melted substance is strained and converted into a yawn. In the penultimate stage, the yarn is weaved into the desired fabric that is suitable for making clothes and rolled up into separated units. The process concludes when the fabric is manufactured into clothes.

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The ~~diagram~~ flow chart illustrates the process of manufacturing clothes using recycled plastic bottles. (Diagram is OK, but "flow chart" is the proper name.)

Overall, the production of clothes from recycled materials involves plastic bottles undergoing various steps ~~phases~~ (wrong word.) in which they are collected, sanitized, and physically altered.

The first stage is when plastic bottles are collected and transported by truck to factories where they are sorted and then cut into small pieces in a specific funnel-shaped shredding machine. Subsequently, these particles (wrong word.) are passed through an apparatus to be washed, after which they are placed in a container and sun-dried for 10 hours. After that, they are transferred to a cylindrical boiler to be melted down. Afterward, the melted substance (wrong word.) is strained and converted into a yawn. In the penultimate stage, the yarn is woven ~~weaved~~ into the desired fabric that is suitable for making clothes and rolled up into separated units. The process concludes when the fabric is manufactured into clothes.

You barely wrote the minimum. Aim to write 170 words for Task 1.

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Here is a sample essay. The process is quite straightforward, so there is not much opportunity to make any comparisons.

The flow chart illustrates the process in which plastics are recycled to make clothing.

Overall, there are three main stages; collecting the used plastic containers, converting these into yarn, and manufacturing the fabric and clothing. The second stage is the most intensive, with six steps, whereas the third stage has half that many.

In detail, in the first stage, used plastic bottles of different sizes are collected by trucks and conveyed to a manufacturing plant. What follows is the second stage, beginning with sorting the bottles and chopping them into small pieces, The fragments are thoroughly washed and then dried for ten hours. They are put into boilers, which heat the plastic to its melting point. The liquid is pressed through a strainer, which forms thin streams of liquid plastic. These become long strands of yarn when cooled and are wound onto spools. At some point in the process, colorant is added to the plastic, to make yarn of different shades. The final stage begins with weaving the yarn on a large mechanical loom, producing fabric, which is rolled into bolts of cloth. The cloth can then be used to make garments.

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