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Living in a country where you have to speak foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Many people believe that residing in a nation where speaking another language, not one's mother tongue, is compulsory can result in a host of issues in terms of socialization and practicality. I partly agree with this statement.

It is undeniable that facing social problems and other practical ones due to its language will be inevitable at first when living in a foreign country. First, the language can act as a deterrent for a person to communicate and make friends with his neighbors. It is common sense that one will avoid conversing in a second language, especially when he is not confident about his proficiency, preventing him from learning the new culture. Second, if one feels hard to express his idea in a foreign language, it will be such a challenge for him when he is in need of groceries, direction, or most importantly medical care.

However, these problems will soon become trivial and less worry-provoking when the person is accustomed to using the new language. In fact, numerous language courses are available at affordable price for new immigrants to join and these courses are of great convenience because they are usually in the evening or at weekends. By joining these classes, people can be trained by qualified language teachers with years of experience, thereby being able to improve their language skills rapidly. Moreover, living in the country whose language a person is learning can create a valuable opportunity for him to practice and hone his language skills. Therefore, although the problems do exist, but soon will be solved.

In conclusion, problems with regards to socializing and daily issues are worth one's attention when he has to converse in a new language. However, taking part in language courses and making efforts to practice the language can allow him to quickly immerse himself in the new living environment.