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The table below shows the number of cars made in Argentina, Australia and Thailand from 2003 to 2009.

The table gives information about changes in the production of cars in three countries: Argentina, Australia and Thailand between 2003 and 2009

Overall, Thailand was the biggest car manufacturer in all three years. While Argentina and Thailand saw a growth in their production, the number of cars made in Australia fell gradually over the period shown.

In 2003, Thailand produced 735,852 cars, followed by Australia, with 452,162 cars made. Although Argentina had the lowest number of cars in that year, its production rose by more than one hundred thousand vehicles over the next two years. By contrast, the figure for Australia dropped to 341,268 vehicles in 2005.

Despite a slight decrease between 2005 and 2009, car production in Thailand still ranked first, with just under one million cars produced, which doubled the figure for Argentina. Australia was the only country that witnessed a steady decline in its car manufacturing, with 245,624 cars produced at the end of the period shown.

AlpheccaStars · Accepted Answer

The table gives information about changes (That is not good. Changes might be percentages or differences. But that is not what is in the table.) in the production of cars in three countries: Argentina, Australia and Thailand in 2003, 2005 and 2009. ~~between 2003 and 2009~~

If you must force a paraphrase, then this is adequate.

The table reports the count of cars manufactured in the years 2003, 2005 and 2009 in each of three countries: Argentina, Australia and Thailand.

Overall, Thailand was the biggest car manufacturer in all three years. While Argentina and Thailand ~~saw a~~ (Countries do not see. They do not have vision. Read my advice on anthropomorphic verbs.) had /showed a rise ~~growth~~ in their production, the number of cars made in Australia fell. ~~gradually over the period shown.~~ (That is not accurate. The number decreased between 2005 and 2009 for Thailand.)

Overall, Thailand manufactured more cars than both Australia and Argentina combined. Production in Argentina increased over time, while it decreased in Australia. The maximum value in the table is for Thailand in 2005.

In 2003, Thailand produced 735,852 cars, followed by Australia, with 452,162 ~~cars made~~. ~~Although~~ Argentina had the lowest number of cars in that year, but its production rose by more than one hundred thousand vehicles in each of the next two entries. ~~over the next two years~~. By contrast, ~~the figure for~~ Australia's dropped to 341,268 ~~vehicles~~ in 2005.

Despite a slight decrease between 2005 and 2009, car production in Thailand still ranked first, with just under one million cars produced, which was double ~~doubled~~ the number ~~figure~~ for Argentina. Australia was the only country that ~~witnessed~~ (poor word choice. Only people can witness events.) had a steady decline in its car manufacturing, with 245,624 cars produced in 2009. ~~at the end of the period shown.~~

AlpheccaStars · Answer

If you just copy the numbers, you will struggle to get a word count over the minimum. You have to use repetitive and unnecessary phrases to bump the word count, and the examiner will notice this.

So you have to use some simple elementary school math to report totals and percentages. Then it will be easy to write an excellent essay.

Totals (in millions)
2003: 1.423
2005: 1.856
2009: 1.712

The percentages can be computed for significant entries; for example Australia's share dropped by more than half, from 30% to 14%.

The table reports the count of cars manufactured in the years 2003, 2005 and 2009 in each of three countries: Argentina, Australia and Thailand.

Overall, Thailand manufactured more cars than both Australia and Argentina combined. Production in Argentina increased over time, while it decreased in Australia. The maximum value listed in the table is for Thailand in 2005.

In 2003, the total number manufactured was about 1.4 million, and it jumped to 1.9 million in the peak year, 2005, and then went down to 1.7 million in 2009. However, the relative proportions contributed by each country changed substantially. Thailand was always at the top, with a bare majority (51%) in 2003, but it increased its share, especially in 2005 when it produced over one million cars (62%). Australia beat out Argentina in 2003, with about 30% of the total, about 452 thousand, but slumped to last place in 2009, with about 245 thousand or14%. Argentina was notable in its steady increase. Starting at about 235 thousand, numbers went up by about 118 thousand, and then 113 thousand. In 2009, it had just over a quarter of the total.

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