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People in many countries have to spend more and more time away from their homes. Why is this? What are the effects on people themselves and their families?

It is a growing trend for people to spend more time away from their homes. There are several reasons for this trend, which is having a negative impact on both individuals and on their families.

There are two main important of this tendency. First, people have to spend more time at work in the search of a better standard of living. As they have to support their family or improve the promotion prospects of work so they need to work busily and can only spend a couple of hours with their family in the evening. For example, many employees have to work over 10 hours a day so it is hard for them to spend more time with their families. Another reason is that because of globalization, people tend to move to other countries or megacities to work or study. So they have to live far away from their families and are only able to return to their home once or twice a month.

Both factors have vital consequences for individuals and their families. . Parents who are often busy with work would have less influence in shaping their children’s personality during a child’s formative years. As a result, children may have more emotional and behavioral problems in the future. Another effect is this would happen more conflict in family life as they can not balance their work and spend enough quality time with their family to lend a sympathetic ear to others’ problems. Furthermore, those who work or study away from home would experience a sense of alienation without such family support. This could lead to negatively affected their productivity or academic performance.

In conclusion, some reasons for this trend can readily be identified, and the consequences are far-reaching for individuals and their families.