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MarvinTheMartian Posted 18 years ago
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0Consider the following sentence: "The ambassador gained the trust of the soldiers when he personally attended to one of their wounded comrades". The problem with this sentence is that it implies that there was more than one wounded soldier on the scene. Using the same sentence structure, how can I indicate that, although there may have been more than one wounded soldier, the ambassador was only aware of the one he helped? I thought of "The ambassador gained the trust of the soldiers when he personally attented to one of their comrades who was wounded", but it sounds a bit awkward. I also considered saying "The ambassador gained the trust of the soldiers when he personally attended to a wounded man", but thought it was too imprecise. Any suggestions?02br
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0Hi,02br 02br 01font 00Consider the following sentence: "The ambassador gained the trust of the soldiers when he personally attended to one of their wounded comrades". The problem with this sentence is that it implies that there was more than one wounded soldier on the scene. Using the same sentence structure, how can I indicate that, although there may have been more than one wounded soldier, the ambassador was only aware of the one he helped?

— Clive

  • 0Hi,02br 02br 01font 00Consider the following sentence: "The ambassador gained the trust of the soldiers when he personally attended to one of their wounded comrades".
  • The problem with this sentence is that it implies that there was more than one wounded soldier on the scene.
  • Using the same sentence structure, how can I indicate that, although there may have been more than one wounded soldier, the ambassador was only aware of the one he helped?
  • 02b 00 01font 00I also02font 00 considered saying "The ambassador gained the trust of the soldiers when he personally attended to a wounded man", but thought it was too imprecise.
  • 02font 02br 02br 00Best wishes, Clive0-
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01font00Consider the following sentence: "The ambassador gained the trust of the soldiers when he personally attended to one of their wounded comrades". The problem with this sentence is that it implies that there was more than one wounded soldier on the scene. Using the same sentence structure, how can I indicate that, although there m
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0Thanks, Clive. You're very helpful, as always. Did you notice anything wrong or odd about my message in general? Is there anything you would have phrased differently? Was my question badly worded? This is one of those days when I can't seem to put sentences together. It's as if nothing made sense to me today.0-
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