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Jeremy1234 Posted 19 years ago
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The Ching and the Yuan
Jeremy Chen
The Qing and Yuan are the two dynasties that increased the economy of dramatically. Even though the time difference between both dynasties is huge, both of these dynasties have allowed the Chinese to understand more thoroughly what is going on in the outside world. The two dynasties that improved cultural/social, economic and political aspects of are the Yuan and Qing.
Yuan and Qing were both the dynasties that were leaded by indigenous groups. Yuan’s culture did not develop really well due to many reasons: they forbid the Han people to learn read or write the Mongolian language, since they focused more on war and conquering they didn’t really care about the development of their culture, so education became a problem. This doesn’t mean they didn’t develop any culture though, the Han people was in control by the Yuan, they focused more on music, fortune telling, and poetry, so Yuan’s music plays a important role in the Chinese music history. Marco Polo’s journey also influenced , he taught the Mongolians how to use catapults. Ming was approximately 250 years in difference with the Yuan, they treated the same way how the Mongolians treated the Han people, they forbid the Han to learn and write the Manchu language. Manchurians wanted to isolate themselves while is still in their control. Since Manchuria is closer to they know the Han people better than the Yuan dynasty. Manchuria linked all 50 tribes in together, which builds a better relationship. The Manchurians also made many new extensions on Novels such as Hong Luo Meng or The Dream of the Red Chamber was a great creation during the Qing. The Qing dynasty focused mainly on literature and philology, but also Art, calligraphy and drama.
The Yuan and Qing improved the economy of . Since Genghis Kang conquered so many lands, open so many new trade routes, this was the stem to let ’s economic status reach the top of the world The Yuan earned profits by mostly cotton spinning, because of selling and trading cotton, it improved the living of the Chinese. Qing linked all the tribes of China together, advancing ’s technology, this made the tribes be together, just like a family reunion.
Those two dynasties, Qing and Yuan did a magnificent job in the politics section, but they extremely excluded the Chinese, leading to many rebellions, leading to their dynasty down fall. Yuan’s founder Genghis Kang was a great leader, after conquering Mongolia, China, and his ambitions didn’t stop, he invaded and conquered part of . After his death his grandson Kublai Khan continued the Yuan dynasty. Yuan’s political was strong, but it was brutal against anyone, they oppressed the Chinese poorly, for example if a Mongolian purposely injured a Han tribe person, the Han tribe person cannot fight back.
Qing uses a similar way of politics but they controlled the Han people in a different way. They treated the Han not as brutal as the Yuan did, but they can still punish them if they violated any laws.
The two dynasties that improved cultural/social, economic and political aspects of are the Yuan and Qing. Even though they treated the Chinese poorly, they gave a big leap in ’s economy, and developing culture leaving the future generations to explore.
GRADING:
Do you have good intro paragraph like an upside down pyramid
Do your subsequent paragraphs begin with good topic sentences
Is your paper historical?
Jeremy Chen
The Qing and Yuan are the two dynasties that increased the economy of dramatically. Even though the time difference between both dynasties is huge, both of these dynasties have allowed the Chinese to understand more thoroughly what is going on in the outside world. The two dynasties that improved cultural/social, economic and political aspects of are the Yuan and Qing.
Yuan and Qing were both the dynasties that were leaded by indigenous groups. Yuan’s culture did not develop really well due to many reasons: they forbid the Han people to learn read or write the Mongolian language, since they focused more on war and conquering they didn’t really care about the development of their culture, so education became a problem. This doesn’t mean they didn’t develop any culture though, the Han people was in control by the Yuan, they focused more on music, fortune telling, and poetry, so Yuan’s music plays a important role in the Chinese music history. Marco Polo’s journey also influenced , he taught the Mongolians how to use catapults. Ming was approximately 250 years in difference with the Yuan, they treated the same way how the Mongolians treated the Han people, they forbid the Han to learn and write the Manchu language. Manchurians wanted to isolate themselves while is still in their control. Since Manchuria is closer to they know the Han people better than the Yuan dynasty. Manchuria linked all 50 tribes in together, which builds a better relationship. The Manchurians also made many new extensions on Novels such as Hong Luo Meng or The Dream of the Red Chamber was a great creation during the Qing. The Qing dynasty focused mainly on literature and philology, but also Art, calligraphy and drama.
The Yuan and Qing improved the economy of . Since Genghis Kang conquered so many lands, open so many new trade routes, this was the stem to let ’s economic status reach the top of the world The Yuan earned profits by mostly cotton spinning, because of selling and trading cotton, it improved the living of the Chinese. Qing linked all the tribes of China together, advancing ’s technology, this made the tribes be together, just like a family reunion.
Those two dynasties, Qing and Yuan did a magnificent job in the politics section, but they extremely excluded the Chinese, leading to many rebellions, leading to their dynasty down fall. Yuan’s founder Genghis Kang was a great leader, after conquering Mongolia, China, and his ambitions didn’t stop, he invaded and conquered part of . After his death his grandson Kublai Khan continued the Yuan dynasty. Yuan’s political was strong, but it was brutal against anyone, they oppressed the Chinese poorly, for example if a Mongolian purposely injured a Han tribe person, the Han tribe person cannot fight back.
Qing uses a similar way of politics but they controlled the Han people in a different way. They treated the Han not as brutal as the Yuan did, but they can still punish them if they violated any laws.
The two dynasties that improved cultural/social, economic and political aspects of are the Yuan and Qing. Even though they treated the Chinese poorly, they gave a big leap in ’s economy, and developing culture leaving the future generations to explore.
GRADING:
Do you have good intro paragraph like an upside down pyramid
Do your subsequent paragraphs begin with good topic sentences
Is your paper historical?
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The essay does not make historical sense. On one hand, you mention how they screwed up and mistreated people. On the other hand, you talk about how the people's lives were better.
- The essay does not make historical sense.
- On one hand, you mention how they screwed up and mistreated people.
- On the other hand, you talk about how the people's lives were better.
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The essay does not make historical sense. On one hand, you mention how they screwed up and mistreated people. On the other hand, you talk about how the people's lives were better.
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