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Mk_nepal Posted 20 years ago
Letter Writing

Please help me in correcting my English

Hi there,

Following letter is written to my boss requesting for computer training. Grateful to correct it. Thank you very much in advance

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Dear ….

As you know I am going to our Bangkok office for web-page training on 11 Oct 06 and the travel and subsistence cost for attending the training will be borne centrally.

I have designed number of be-spoke programs using Visual Basis 5 software for office. So while in Bangkok, I would like to do “Upgrading Visual Basic 6 from 5” training. The detail of the course is attached. The training total cost is only $xxx. This is one day training which schedule to start on 28 Sep 06. There is no alternate date available that closer to my planed training (11 Oct). Attending this course would be very useful and greatly benefited on followings:

1. Design and build robust and attractive programme
2. Modify existing programme to enhance productivity and functionality
3. Enhance my knowledge in Visual Basic Programming

If you consider to do this course at the same time while visiting Bangkok office, I could arrange my visit accordingly. The following is my purposed plan:

1. 28 Sep 06 – Visual Basic Training (XYZ Training Centre)
2. 29 Sep -10 Oct – Annual Leave
3. 11-12 – Web Training (Bangkok Office)

I would be very grateful if you could consider my development opportunities and approve it. Thank you.

Regards,


  

Top answer

Hi, I've suggested a number of changes, so please read carefully. Good luck, Clive Dear …. As you know, I am going to our Bangkok office for web-page training on 11 Oct.

  • Hi, I've suggested a number of changes, so please read carefully.
  • Good luck, Clive Dear ….
  • As you know, I am going to our Bangkok office for web-page training on 11 Oct.
  • 06 and the travel and subsistence cost for attending the training will be borne centrally.
  • I have designed a number of customized programs using Visual Basic 5 office software so, while in Bangkok, I would like to do “Upgrading Visual Basic 6 from 5” training.
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Hi,

I've suggested a number of changes, so please read carefully.

Good luck, Clive

Dear ….

As you know, I am going to our Bangkok office for web-page training on 11 Oct. 06 and the travel and subsistence cost for attending the training will be borne centrally.

I have design
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Many thanks Clive,

You have a really nice way of correcting mistakes. I satisfied with your corrections and can’t tell you how grateful I am. You have solved my problem.

You asked: “1. Design and build robust and attractive <<< what does 'attractive' mean here? Programs”

I mean to say “more user friendly and nice looking” programs

And again plea
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Hi again,

I would be very grateful if you could consider and approve this development opportunity for me and put these forward to HR section. Thank you.

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I would be very grateful if you could consider and approve this development opportunity for me and forward it to the HR section. Thank you.

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Thanks Clive,

You could also say me your another Nepali student as you are correctting me like my English teacher.

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