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Danh197 Posted 5 years ago
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The two maps illustrate how a park change between 1980 and now

Overall, the park transformed significantly, seeing in the improvement of transport system with pedestrianization and the addition of recreational facilities such as play ground or barbecue area.

In 1980, when visitors accessed to the park, the could face the large area for flowers on their right, but today it has been replace in flavor of the new playground. Another flowers area, which was opposite to the above one, has been transfer into a bush. Except for that change, there is a slight addition on the number of benches and others remains the same.

The triangle on the northeast, which used to be a large green space for the park, was diminished and others facilities has taken place in with chairs, desks and barbecue. One striking change is that there were 2 additional ways on the north and east to access into the park and they has splited the park into four separated areas instead of two in 1980.



  

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The two maps illustrate how a park change (wrong form) between 1980 and now (missing punctuation) Overall, the park transformed significantly, seeing in the improvement of transport system (There are no busses or trains in either map. ) with pedestrianization and the addition of recreational facilities such as the play ground or and picnic barbecue area. In 1980, when visitors accessed to (wrong verb phrase.

  • The two maps illustrate how a park change (wrong form) between 1980 and now (missing punctuation) Overall, the park transformed significantly, seeing in the improvement of transport system (There are no busses or trains in either map.
  • ) with pedestrianization and the addition of recreational facilities such as the play ground or and picnic barbecue area.
  • In 1980, when visitors accessed to (wrong verb phrase.
  • "access to" is noun + preposition, not a verb.
  • We do not have access to the internet at the top of Mount Palomar.
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The two maps illustrate how a park change (wrong form) between 1980 and now (missing punctuation)

Overall, the park transformed significantly, seeing in the improvement of transport system (There are no busses or trains in either map. This is poor English.) with

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