Please help me fix my letter
June 7th, 2019
Dear Security Officers of 400 Virginia Ave, SW. I hope this email finds you well.
The property a 400 Virginia Ave is having some upcoming renovations in the next few months. They are getting a new fitness center and conference center. This project will need to be monitored on a daily basis because of the equipment that will be used. Latrice is the new Tenant Service Coordinator, Jackie Barnes is the new Concierge. It has been brought to my attention that the front desk has not been kept as well as it should be. Please make sure the desk is wiped down after every shift, the phones are wiped down and the cords underneath the desk are not touched. The reason for wiping down the phones is to eliminate germs. Also, the cords underneath the desk are connected to the WIFI which sometimes go out and make it hard for the concierge to do her work. Please use the long heavy duty white cord to charge your devices or use the power strip. Please do not leave food in the drawer as this could draw bugs. If you need to store your food please use the cleaning staff fridge and microwave if necessary. Also, Starting on Monday June 10th, 2019 the guard is required to do hourly rounds of the building. Please walk all floors starting from the top to bottom. This way is something is out of place the Guard service will be able to catch. I will be monitoring the up keep of the desk on a regular basis. If you have any questions or concerns please contact me @ 240-615-3197 or email Email Removed
Thank you for being on my team
Charlene Womack Lead Supervisor.
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Forgive me for saying that this email seems to be full of disorganized thoughts. You need to try to organize it into a series of paragraphs, each dealing with a different point or topic If there is something specific that you want done, make sure that is clear to the readers. If you want to revise this and post it again, we'd be happy to help you further.
- Forgive me for saying that this email seems to be full of disorganized thoughts.
- You need to try to organize it into a series of paragraphs, each dealing with a different point or topic If there is something specific that you want done, make sure that is clear to the readers.
- If you want to revise this and post it again, we'd be happy to help you further.
- Clive.
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Forgive me for saying that this email seems to be full of disorganized thoughts.
You need to try to organize it into a series of paragraphs, each dealing with a different point or topic
If there is something specific that you want done, make sure that is clear to the readers.
If you want to revise this and post it again, we'd be happy to help you further.
Clive.
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