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Topic: some people believe that living in big cities is becoming more difficult. Others believe that it is getting easier. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

People have different views about whether it is difficult for people to live in urban areas. While some people think that this problem is challenging for person to have a life in city regions, I will argue that living those places is getting easier.

On the one hand,There are various reasons why people should not live in large urban areas. First, big cities attractive a variety of domestic investment as well as foreign investment, so a huge number of factories increase dramatically. This makes the air is extremely polluted by smoke from industrial companies. As a result, there are more and more people get serious diseases such as lung cancer and tuberculosis. Second, there are a great number of people and transports in big cities,so traffic jam is an unavoidable issue. People can not go to work on time because they often stuck in rush hours. Furthermore, the cost of living in large cities which become economic centers of country is quite high. Therefore, it is difficult for poor people and workers to live in major urban regions as they have to pay a great deal of money for public services such as health service and postal service while their salary is too low.

On the other hand, I believe that individuals will have more benefits, if they live in major cities. The first convenience is that people have more opportunities to study and work in the best environment because they there are various excellent university for them to chose in big city. Therefore, after they graduate from university, they will seek a prospective job easily with good salary in major urban regions which concentrate a huge number of big companies. Moreover, city dwellers may enjoy the best service. When people are sick or suffer a disease,they will not have to be worried because they can find talented doctor in big hospitals to their illness can be cured in short time.

In conclusion, while several people think that city life has some negative effects, it seems to me that it is more comfortable to live in a major urban areas.