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In some countries, young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing highschool and starting university studies. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for young people who decide to do this.

Upon graduating from high school, young people in some countries are suggested to take a gap year in order to travel or go to work. In my opinion, the advantages seem to outweigh the dis advantages of this tendency.

Taking a year off straight after finishing high school is beneficial in some ways. Firstly, high school graduates would be able to gain real-world experience. By travelling to different places and foreign countries to discover a variety of cultures, youngsters can easily broaden their horizon of knowledge, which help them become global citizens. Secondly, in a year off, young people can seek employment or do internship, which leads to more maturity and working experience. This may help them to obtain a lot of skills and qualifications in their further professions. In employment prospective, university graduates with working experience may progress rapidly in their career.

However, there are also a number of disadvantages of travelling and working for a year between fishing high school and starting university studies. Financial problems should be taken into account first. It is likely that parents might not support financially, high school graduates have to manage to make a living to pay personal expenditures and even travel costs. Further more, after one year off, youngsters may face with social integration changes. Although they become socially independent, they lack of academic knowledge and skills, there fore find it hard to keep up with their peers.

In conclusion, there is no denying that spending one-year-time to travel and work will enhance youngsters’ resume and provide a fountain of knowledge. However, this trend is not suitable for people who are new to travel and work because there would be hardships and problems that are difficult for youngsters to deal with.

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