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Dissatisfaction

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moli Dissatisfaction

Every morning I send my daughter to school so very early , and head for work. I often arrive at the office so early that I find ~~out~~ the door ~~closed when I get to the office~~ still locked.
I love to listen to music while I am wandering around the corridor, waiting for the office to open . At the same time , the cleaner is busy with ~~the~~ her work. I seldom say hello ~~to her~~, but that doesn’t mean I am an impolite lady. In fact, the real reason it is that the cleaner is always complaining when she meets someone : “I am fed up with those who throw rubbish here and there !", and it drives me crazy. ”

In the company where I worked two years ago, the ~~The~~ sales manager was a woman ~~aged~~ more than 40 years of age. ~~old when I worked for a company two years ago.~~ Most of my colleagues always ~~make~~ made ~~some~~ excuses / some excuse to avoid being with her, for she ~~says~~ said the same words all the time : “I have been working in the company for many years, and I am under pressure that you can’t imagine . Sometimes I want to quit.”

In It is a state of dissatisfaction which / that makes them lose ~~the~~ interest in the work.

Avangi · Answer

moli This morning I received a friend’s short message, ~~who told~~ telling me that he was happy to receive the Christmas card from me.

~~Both of us~~ We met on the internet by accident in Apr, 2008. He was so busy with his work so that he hardly had time to chat with me online. But he always left some message on QQ such as "Take care of yourself ," or "Be careful on the way home". He really ~~impressed me~~ made a lasting impression in my memory.

I bought a morning newspaper on Oct 17, 2008. At noon I noticed that my daughter's article was published in that newspaper. I got very excited ~~at that moment~~ and wanted to buy another copy. ~~the newspaper~~ again. ~~But it was nearly impossible to buy it at noon, for that morning newspaper has been sold well.~~ But by then, the morning paper was sold out at all the local newsstands.

I called him to ~~ask for help~~ explain the situation, and he answered that he would do his best to ~~do that.~~ help me. At about 3 o'clock pm in the afternoon, ~~he sent it to me.~~ I received a copy of the newspaper from him.

Moli · Answer

Thank you, Avangi.

The christmas is around the corner.

Merry Christmas!

Moli · Answer

Hi, Avangi, long time no see, are you OK?
Could you please help me to correct my bolgs, thanks a lot in advance.

No.1
I have been working for the present company for two months. I get along well with my colleagues, one of them said that I am more capable than the former one in the work.

My daugher had a new Chinese teahcer when she studied in grade three in the primary school, however, some of the parents thought that the new teacher was bad at teaching and was unqulified for a teacher.

I worked for a bump firm as office assistant in 2005. A new comer worked hard, but our sales manager said to me that she was stupid.

Don’t talk about others at the back of them.

No.2
My daughter got ill and had a rest at home last Thursday. She guessed that her friend would call her, yeah, the telephone rang in the evening and my daugher answered it happily.

I am sure that my friend in the North will send a special gift to me on my birthday every year, for he cherishes our friendship between us.

I went back to my hometown in 2003. My mother prepared nice dishes for us every day while my father took my daughter to go out for fun . We surely had a good time together.

Why are we sure about something? Because our friends and family care about us and love us.

Avangi · Answer

moli No.1

I have been working for the present company for two months, and ~~. I~~ get along well with my colleagues. ~~, one~~ One of them said that I am more capable than the ~~former one in the work~~. person I replaced.

My daugher has entered ~~had a new Chinese teahcer when she studied in~~ grade three in the primary school, and has a new Chinese teacher. However, ~~however,~~ some of the parents think this teacher is ~~thought that the new teacher was bad at teaching and was~~ unqulified. ~~for a teacher.~~

I worked for a bump firm as office assistant in 2005. A new comer worked hard, but our sales manager said to me that she was stupid. My advice: Don’t talk about others ~~at the back of them.~~ behind their backs.

No.2

My daughter ~~got~~ became ill and had a to rest at home last Thursday. She guessed that her friend would call her. ~~yeah, the~~ Yeah. The telephone rang in the evening and my daugher answered it happily.

I am sure that my friend in the North will send a special gift to me on my birthday every year, for he cherishes our friendship. ~~between us~~.

I went back to my hometown in 2003. My mother prepared nice dishes for us every day while my father took my daughter ~~to go~~ out ~~for~~ to have fun . We surely had a good time together. ~~Why are we sure about something?~~ We are sure about one thing. Why? Because our friends and family care about us and love us.

Moli · Answer

Thank you, many envy me for having such a good friend like you.

Avangi, wish you happy every day!

Moli · Answer

Hi, Avangi, please help me amend the articles as follows, many thanks in advance!

1. winner

“Mom, my Dad took me to have wonton after I took the examination.” No sooner had my daughter called me than she got home yesterday. She added: “There were two wonton houses before, but there is only one that offers the good service and the delicious wonton.”

Two girls came to our office to have interview. One is 30, Shanghainese, introverted. The other is 25, extroverted and from province. The boss made the final decision after he talked with both of them. He informed the former girl to go to work next Monday, for her behavior left a deep impression on the boss’s mind.

You are a winner doesn’t mean you are perfect, but I am sure that you have advantage in some way.

2.choose

An entertainment writer once asked Yan Ni: “What brought you after you acted in a film directed by Zhang Yimou.” Yan Ni said with smile calmly: “I made no efforts to act in every TV play or film, sometimes I like a drama, however the director had chosen other actress. Now I can pick up the one I like most among so many excellent dramas.

Speaking frankly, I had difficulty in looking for a job because I had little work experience after graduating from college, I felt upset at that time. But now I am confident in myself, do you know why I said so? I have worked for more than ten years, especially I once worked for a foreign company.

Prepare yourself and you will definitely gain more opportunities than others.

3.record

I form a habit of writing down the date and site in the first page after I buy the new books.

In order to record the feelings about the life, I like to write blogs in Chinese and English.

I would like to record the process of growing of my daughter by taking photo of her.

My daughter is in charge of keeping accounts in her class.

In my opinion, recording is a very meaning thing. So from now on, record you life well in any way you like.

4.companion

I took my daughter to the supermakert last Sunday. On the way home, my daughter wanted to buy some fish and said to me: “Mom, sometimes I feel lonely, but I will be happy if I have fish.”

To be honest with you, I have few good friends in life, but music and books have been accompanying me all the time.

One workmate of mine who divorced two years ago told me: I spend most of time to accompay my son except working, for I find the life full of happiness with him.

Who is your companion in life?

Avangi · Answer

moli 1. winner
“Mom, my Dad took me to have wonton after I took the examination.”

This was yesterday. No sooner had my daughter called me than she walked in/through the door. ~~got home yesterday.~~

She added: “There were two wonton houses before, but there is only one that offers ~~the~~ such good service and ~~the~~ delicious wonton.”

Two girls came to our office ~~to have~~ for an interview. One is 30, Shanghainese, [and] introverted. The other is 25, extroverted and from Shenyang, Liaoning Province. The boss made the final decision after he talked with both of them. He informed the former girl to go come to work next Monday . ~~for~~ Apparently, her behavior left a deep impression on the boss’s mind.

The phrase, "You are a winner" doesn’t mean you are perfect, but I am sure it indicates that you have an advantage in some way.

2.choose Please check this one again. I can't figure some of it out. Eg, "what brought you to X??

An entertainment writer once asked Yan Ni: “What brought you after you acted in a film directed by Zhang Yimou.” Yan Ni said with smile calmly: “I made no efforts to act in every TV play or film, sometimes I like a drama, however the director had chosen other actress. Now I can pick up the one I like most among so many excellent dramas.

Speaking frankly, I had difficulty in looking for a job because I had little work experience after graduating from college, I felt upset at that time. But now I am confident in myself, do you know why I said so? I have worked for more than ten years, especially I once worked for a foreign company.

Prepare yourself and you will definitely gain more opportunities than others.

3.record

~~I form a habit of writing~~ I have formed the habit of writing / I make it a habit to write down the date and ~~site~~ place of purchase in the first page after I buy ~~the new books.~~ a new book.

In order to record ~~the~~ my feelings about ~~the~~ life, I like to write blogs in Chinese and English.

I would like to record the process of ~~growing of~~ my daughter['s] growing up by taking photos of her. (Some would use the appostrophe-s here - I would not.)

My daughter is in charge of keeping accounts in her class.

In my opinion, recording is a very ~~meaning~~ meaningful thing. So from now on, record you life well in any way you like.

4.companion

I took my daughter to the supermakert last Sunday. On the way home, my daughter wanted to buy some fish and said to me: “Mom, sometimes I feel lonely, but I will be happy if I have fish.”

To be honest with you, I have few good friends in life, but music and books have been my constant companions. ~~accompanying me all the time.~~

One workmate of mine who divorced two years ago told me: "Except for work, I spend most of my time ~~to accompay~~ with my son ~~except working~~, for I find my ~~the~~ life is full of happiness with him."

Who is your companion in life?

Moli · Answer

Thanks for your kind help.<img class='emoticon' style='Width:19px;Height:19px;' data-delaysrc='https://uat-englishforward-forums-backend.s3.us-west-2.amazonaws.com/Emoticons/1.gif' src='https://uat-englishforward-forums-backend.s3.us-west-2.amazonaws.com/Emoticons/1.gif' alt='Emotion: smile'/>

Avangi · Answer

So what do you mean by the first sentence of 2. ??

Please help me correct the article, thank you!

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