Please help me correct my writing. Thank you so much.

Ielts Writing task 2

Topic: Some people claim that museums and art galleries are not needed today, because everyone can see historical objects or art works by computer. Do you agree or disagree?

Answer
It is true that technology provides lots of modern functions that help people can able to see historical
objects an works of art on a computer screen. However, I disagree with the view museums and galleries
are being replaced by technology.
It is easy for people to access to the Internet to search for historical events or art works. Internet
contains a wide range of information that people do not need to go to art places to find what they need.
This is a very common way for people to see exhibitions while they are at home, they can save a lot of
times and money. For example, in this Covid-19 situation, people are encouraged to stay at home, a lot
of shows and exhibitions are organized online for people who love arts can attend and enjoy arts.
With my disagreement that museums and art galleries are not essential, I personally think that art
places need to be maintained until the future. Historical places and art galleries are the icon of a
country, they attract many tourists to come and visit. With a high number of visitors every year, this
help government develop tourism. For instance, Vietnam is famous for historical events in the past,
many foreigners would like to come and see what happened by going to historical museum in Vietnam.
Also attend at the real museums and galleries, it provides a fully feelings to the guests more than they
enjoy arts at home.
In conclusion, although people can find anything from Internet, art galleries and museums need to
continue open to deliver the fullest experience for the visitors.