Please help me correct my writing task 1. Thank you so much.

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The bar chart shows the amount of oil produced in 6 different countries from 1990 to 2010, measured in millions of barrels per day.

In general, oil production in countries in the chart all experienced the trend of increasing throughout the period. Among 6 countries in the chart, Arab Saudi was the leading country in producing oil, whereas this figure for Qatar was the lowest.

During this 20-years period, there was a noteworthy rise in Arab Saudi. At the beginning of 1990, this country’s oil production capacity was just over 8 million barrels per day, this grew moderately and hit a peak of 14 million barrels per day at the end of this period, in 2010. On the contrary, the lowest country in terms of oil production capacity, Qatar, saw rare changes, relatively stable at less than 1 million barrels per day despite the insignificant rise in 2000.

There was also a slight increase in the other 4 countries in the chart. Despite the slow increase speed, this figure in Iran finally reached a peak of over 4 million barriers per day compared to other countries such as Iraq, Kuwait, and the UAE, at nearly 4 million barriers per day.

AlpheccaStars · Accepted Answer

I have highlighted the mistakes in your essay. It is a good try. Task 1 is quite challenging

If you read my advice carefully in the links below, you may be able to fix most of these mistakes.

For example, you did not use "peak" correctly. There is only one peak on this bar chart, and that is for Qatar in 2000. However, the word "peak" should only be used on line graphs which have continuous, rather than discrete, data values over time.

If you have questions about any of your errors, please ask.

IELTS TASK 1: Hints, Tips And Advice

Vocabulary Words For Task 1: Reference Post

The bar chart shows the amount of oil produced (That is not what the chart shows. It does not show production of oil. Study the figure carefully.) in 6 (Do not use numerals for small numbers that are not data values. Use words) six different countries from 1990 to 2010, (Not good. This is not a line graph. There are discrete years which are shown, not a continuous period of time. What are the years for which data is given?) measured in millions of barrels per day. (Incomplete. What are the six countries? Describe all aspects of the figure in the first paragraph. Do not mention any of the data values.)

In general, oil production in countries ~~in the chart~~ (The reader knows you are writing about the chart. Do not include such phrases unless there are two figures given, a chart and a table, for example.) all experienced (See my advice. ) ~~the trend of increasing~~ had an increasing trend throughout the period. Among 6 countries in the chart, Arab Saudi was the leading country in producing oil, whereas this figure for Qatar was the lowest.

During this 20-years period, there was a noteworthy (It is far better to use mathematical language rather than descriptive language.) rise in Arab Saudi. At the beginning of 1990, this country’s oil production capacity (That is correct!) was just over 8 million barrels per day, this grew moderately and hit a peak (There is no peak. ) of 14 million barrels per day at the end of this period, in 2010. On the contrary, the ~~lowest~~ country with the least ~~in terms of~~ oil production capacity, Qatar, saw rare changes, relatively stable (ungrammatical( at less than 1 million barrels per day despite an ~~the~~ ~~insignificant~~ minor peak ~~rise~~ in 2000.

There was also a slight increase in the other 4 countries ~~in the chart.~~ Despite the slow increase speed, (It is not a race. "Speed" is not a good word.) this figure in Iran ~~finally~~ reached a peak (There is no peak. ) of over 4 million barriers per day compared to other countries such as Iraq, Kuwait, and the UAE, at nearly 4 million barriers per day.

Please help me correct my writing task 1. Thank you so much.

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