Please help me correct my task 2

Schools are supposed to be a favorable environment for students to study and have fun. However, in recent years, bullying has become more and more common. In this passage, I would like to take a closer look into the causes of the problem and suggest some practical solutions as well.

There is a variety of reasons why bullying happens. First of all, it is in the nature of the children. That some children are born with aggressive behavior plus lack of education and inappropriate nursing environment inclines them to bully others. Secondly, indifference from adults is to be blamed for the spread of bullying. Unless parents, teachers, or sometimes peers get involved, bullies and those who intend to bully will find it easier to abuse their victims. Last but not least, it is likely that a victim of bullying may one day become a bully under certain circumstances. Those who know the feeling of being bullied for a long time may end up being one when getting a chance to do so because it makes them feel the sense of revenging.

Nevertheless, some ways have been put forward in order to solve this issue. Firstly, it is recommendation that strict punishment be carried out. Schools can give rehabilitation classes to make sure that those naughty children know how to behave themselves. Also, schools can make them do some labour work such as cleaning up the grass, sweep the schoolyard, picking up trashes. Moreover, financial fine could be a possible solution as it puts pressure on parents which makes them have to educate their children better or they will lose their money. Another remedy is love. Teachers and parents should spend more time with their children because love surely alleviate hatred.

All in all, a child born with aggressive manner doesn’t mean he has to live aggressively his whole life. Love along with well-rounded education will definitely be optimal measures to deal with the problem of bullying. Punishment is not always good, especially corporal one.

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