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In the past many male leaders have led our society to conflicts and violence. The world would be better governed and more peaceful if it was ruled by women. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Many are of the opinion the male inclination towards violence is the root of many international conflicts and societies ruled by women might be more peaceful. In my opinion, this is likely true.

It is generally believed that women have gentler personalities than men in the way they act. But, it does not guarantee that if a woman leads a country or a society, they can prevent conflicts, clashes, or violence from happening because a leader is not the only party causing or triggering conflicts. In running her government and taking a decision or a policy, a female leader cooperates with and discusses a lot with many other parties so I do not think that her mother figure will come first in dealing with various complicated problems her government is facing. Instead, she can not give priority to her feminine feeling (caring, loving, affecting, etc) in policymaking. A leader, either female or male, needs to take action in accordance with the situation. That is why I believe that the gender of a leader makes no difference in this issue. Many countries like Bangladesh, India, and Pakistan were governed by female leaders and yet the conflict and violence increased during their time and this is a clear indication that a female leader cannot guarantee and peaceful society.

Furthermore, conflicts frequently arise as a result of a leader's inability or lack of leadership skill in running his or her leadership. In any country, leaders' incapacity, regardless of gender, causes a slew of issues, including dissatisfaction among citizens and a decline in public trust in the government, both of which are likely to result in chaos, clashes, and conflict. I am confident that everyone will agree that leadership ability and capability are unrelated to gender. It is absurd to assume that men are better at leading organizations than women, or that women are better at leading organizations than men. Moreover, an organization's or government's success or failure is determined not only by the leader, but also by the staff and cabinet. No matter how capable the leader is, he or she will not be able to execute his or her government programs to bring prosperity for his or her people and to satisfy them if he or she does not have a good team.