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Topic: Many museums and historical sites are mainly visited by tourists but not local people. Why is this the case and what can be done to attract more local people to visit these places ?

Nowadays, many museums and historical sites have become out of the locals’ interest but more appealing to tourists due to a few causes. Although there are undoubtedly some negative effects of this phenomenon, some resolutions have been proposed.

There are three main reasons as to why fewer people visit traditional places in their hometown. Firstly, they might be too familiar with museums or historical buildings. Individuals living in the neighborhood, therefore, consider coming to these sites a waste of time. Secondly, we ourselves usually find museums visually unattractive and turn to recreational centers as they easily capture our attention and also offer a wide range of light-hearted activities. Last but not least, it is sometimes wrongly seen as unnecessary for the government to restore the sites which have historical values, culminating in a sharp fall in local tourism.

Sveral measures should be taken in order to tackle the problem. To help serve both didactic and recreational purpose, teachers should organize some fields trips to museums and other similar places and assign the students relevant projects so as to encourage them to acquire a profound understanding of their country’s historical backgrounds. In the same way, every company should propose a policy concerning the reward of taking staff to historical destinations each year if they meet the company’s targets. Additionally, it is prerequisite that the government make a few refinements and renovate conventional areas with more exterior and interior decorations. Doing so would pick the locals’ interest and impress the tourists so strongly that they would come back next time.

In conclusion, as long as we manage to make the aforementioned improvements, the nearby museums and historical sites would be major tourist attractions to both local people travellers.