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Anonymous Posted 13 years ago
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The Underwood International College is an all-English liberal arts college located within Yonsei University in Korea. UIC offers a truly multinational experience, with students and faculty from all over the world. As a relatively new college, UIC is always thinking of ways to define itself and its educational mission. In ur view, what makes UIC an interesting or unique place? As a potential student here, what would u bring to UIC, and why is UIC the college of ur choice??(no more than 250 words)

When i first knew abt UIC college through the Internet the past few months ago,my only thought abt the school was : like any other international colleges, UIC offers students from all over the world with an immersive multinational environment and extensive network. However later i found out that UIC is the first and only independant liberal arts college in Asia to conduct all classes in English, which brought my interest in the school to a higher level. Therefore, in my own opinion, UIC has, without fail, showed its distinction and uniqueness among others by developing an East- Asia based liberal arts education.(103)
I believe i have within myself an adequate knowledge about my country's richness in cultural and traditional customs, and I'm always eager to bring and introduce it to the world, and without doubt, UIC makes itself a perfect place for me contribute to the college's diversity. And also, as a potential student, I hope that i can dedicate a small part to UIC's challenge to become the most prestigious college in the world by my accomplishments in study, also at work ( abt 84).
I've always wanted to become a person that can help bring my country to a better place. Therefore, UIC plays a vital role in the realization of my dream to devote myself to help the development of Vietnam, not to mention its possibility to give me the view of my own future from now. That is why my intention to apply to UIC has never changed since May.
  

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I have highlighted some areas that need attention. After you fix the grammatical errors, then you can work on the content. The Underwood International College is an all-English liberal arts college located within Yonsei University in Korea.

  • I have highlighted some areas that need attention.
  • After you fix the grammatical errors, then you can work on the content.
  • The Underwood International College is an all-English liberal arts college located within Yonsei University in Korea.
  • UIC offers a truly multinational experience, with students and faculty from all over the world.
  • As a relatively new college, UIC is always thinking of ways to define itself and its educational mission.
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I have highlighted some areas that need attention. After you fix the grammatical errors, then you can work on the content.

The Underwood International College is an all-English liberal arts college located within Yonsei University in Korea. UIC offers a truly multinational experience, with students and faculty from all over the world. As a relatively new college, UIC is always
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thank u very much. Btw, do u have any idea of improving this essay?????
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First, welcome to English Forums, Ngoc Anh!

Next, please do not use "texting" language to post here. It is not correct English, and we encourage learners to practice their best English.

Finally, I wrote you to first fix the grammatical errors, then we can improve the content.
However, I will make a few observations

1) The instructions say this: ...what makes UIC an i
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Thank you very much, I'll pay more attention to the "texting language" issue. Your suggestions are great, I really appreciate it, I'll try to rewrite it again considering your suggestions.

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