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Topic: The maps below show the changes of an island. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make conparisons where revalent.
My essay:
The two given maps demonstrate the same the island surrounded by ocean with a beautiful beach lied in the west of the land and palm trees dotted around the island. Overall, the land develops itself in terms of tourism.
The most conspicuous change can be seen is two complex blocks of accommodations. Along the horizontal axis are two blocks of houses built in circle. The smaller block located on the left side of the island including 6 houses conected with a simming zone by a footpath whereas the bigger one is loacated in the east of the island.
Moving to the northsouth axis, we see three buildings consisting of a reception, a pier and a restaurant. The tree buildings are connected with each other by a vihicle track. The pier plays a crucial role as an entrance gate serving the luxury yatchs.
Top answer
First, you did not write 150 words or more. Your score will be decreased. Second, you have many spelling errors.
- First, you did not write 150 words or more.
- Your score will be decreased.
- Second, you have many spelling errors.
- Third, your essay is not logically designed.
- Paragraph 1: Describe the figure, that is two maps before and after development.
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First, you did not write 150 words or more. Your score will be decreased.
Second, you have many spelling errors.
Third, your essay is not logically designed.
Paragraph 1: Describe the figure, that is two maps before and after development.
Paragraph 2: Describe the first map.
Paragraph 3: Describe the second map and all the changes.
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