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It is generally believed that some people are born with certain talents, for instance for sport or music, and others are not. However, it is sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sports person or musician.

It is an undeniable that every person in the world was born with innate talents different from ones. Some individuals are certain good at sport, music, art and other abilities they have. However, I personally believe that anyone can become proficient in that skills if they are educated.

In fact, few children are born with a talent. For instance, I saw a little girl only 4 years old come from Russia who can speak 7 languages in a program on television. On the ordered case, a three years old child can play multiple drums at the same time as a professional musician. I am confident that a child can not learn such skills at the age of three or four years old. Maybe, they are inherited from their parents because it is not surprising when a great singer' son can also sing well and they achieve many prizes when they were young.

In contrast to this, in the world, there are many people who differ from their family, people who are taught with professional and systematic training, each one may surprisingly brilliant person in not only academic but also entertainment field. Those who are capable of marking amazing achievement in the later day. As a result, if not having innate talents, education system hard-working can successful in one field. For example, many singers are not a genius when they were born, but along with their endless effort and learning until now they become the famous singers in around the word.

I truly believe that talent can be learned by passion and dedication. We would not have some the greatest talents like Tom Cruise, Lenardo Dicaprio if they stopped trying after their initial failures. If talent is acquired by birth then they would have stopped the action after a successful film in starting off his career.

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