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TOPIC: Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world, others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

Some people believe that knowledge, especial in science, commerce or academic fields should be publicized spreadly. Others argue that it is not good to share all information because of its precious and vital features and I strongly agree with the second statement.

On one hand, people who support the first idea maybe believe that we are living together in the world so each person takes duties and benefits in access the information. Also, diferent knowledge in vast fields could mutually support and develope one another If they do not do that, it would take them much more time to achive targets. For example, in finding the way to treat the malaria, scientists’s results and biologists’s ones have contributed together to explore what the reason of this epidemic is and its cure.

On the other hand, some people believe that precious or vital information should not be shared widely and I think it is better to do that because these reasons:

First, everybody knows that it is really hard to get new knowledge in any fields, especially if that information involves in science and biology since researchers have to work nonstop to find the true and in some cases, information could cost their health or even their lives. For example, in researching the way to treat HIV- the 21st epidemic, researches had approached many people who suffers this sickness to carry out researchs, experiments so they would be potentially affected HIV.

Second, if all of the information is publicized, the number of crimes could increase highly and greatly since criminals would take advantage of the results of researchs to make sins. Everyone knows that cyber crime or hackers have recently gone up and threatned a security of the world, there are a lot of incidents that was related to hackers, especially the incident of hacking innocent people’s ID and taking their money away.

In conclusion, there are convincing arguments both for and against the topic “ should information be shared as much ad possible” but I believe that people should limit to share the valuable, vital information freely.

AlpheccaStars · Accepted Answer

In general, I do not follow the logic of your arguments. Consider other approaches to the topic.

Some people believe that knowledge, (I would make a sure bet on a statement that everyone agrees that scientific knowledge should be disseminated through schools and universities. But that is not the topic question. The topic question does not mention "knowledge.".). especial (Wrong form) in science, commerce or academic fields should be publicized spreadly. Others argue that it is not good to share all information because of its precious and vital features (I don't know what you mean. What is a vital feature of information?) and I strongly agree with the second statement.

On one hand, people who support the first idea (What is the first idea? ) maybe believe that we are living together in the world so each person takes duties (??) and benefits in (Wrong word) access the information (What information?). Also, diferent knowledge in vast fields could mutually support and develope one another If they do not do that, it would take them (Who?) much more time to achive targets. For example, in finding the way to treat the malaria, scientists’s results and biologists’s ones have contributed together to explore what the reason of this epidemic is and its cure. (Again, the topic is not about sharing general knowledge in various fields.)

On the other hand, some people believe that precious or vital information (Please give an example of a piece of information that is "vital" or "precious.") should not be shared widely and I think it is better to do that because these reasons:

First, everybody knows that it is really hard to get new knowledge in any fields, especially if that information involves in science and biology since researchers have to work nonstop to find the true and in some cases, information could cost their health ( The researchers' health?) or even their lives. For example, in researching the way to treat HIV- the 21st epidemic (Have there been only 20 epidemics?) , researches had approached many people who suffers this sickness to carry out researchs, experiments so they would be potentially affected HIV. (I don't understand your argument. Are you saying that contact with HIV-positive people can cause a researcher to contract the disease? What does that have to do with sharing information?)

Second, if all of the information is publicized, the number of crimes could increase highly and greatly since criminals would take advantage of the results of researchs to make sins. Everyone knows that cyber crime or hackers have recently gone up and threatned a security of the world, there are a lot of incidents that was related to hackers, especially the incident (only one?) of hacking innocent people’s ID and taking their money away. (I don't understand how hacking is related to scientific research. Hackers and scammers are not scientists, academics, or legitimate business people. )

In conclusion, there are convincing arguments both for and against the topic “ should information be shared as much ad possible” but I believe that people should limit to share the valuable, vital information freely.

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