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1. Stabilizing in 2 months, the number of tourists declines significantly during the end of the year.
2. Hitting the bottom at 100 points,S&P-index is predicted to gradually increase next year.
3. The number of internet user experience an erratic trend at first 3 years, follow by a downward trend in next 2 years.
4. The gold output, last year followed the downward trend, rise significantly in the next year.
5. After a slight decrease, the number of television exported stabilizes at 2 million in two months later, ending the year with a quick increase.
6. Experiencing with a fluctuation from 300 to 900 between 2002 and 2007, the number of cars remained unchanged in 3 years later and hit a peak at 1200 at the end of period.
7. The number of CDs consumed in Germany and Japan followed a downward trend in 2002, with the former dropping form 3 million to 1 million and the latter from 5 million to 2 million.
8. Despite of two opposite trend in the first 3 years, the unemployment rate of US and Canada remain stable, with the former standing at 3 million people and the latter at 1 million.
9. The number of oversea students in Vietnam was fluctuated in recent years, with a significant increase and hit a peak at 200,000 in 2006, a decline to 100,000 in 2007 and remain unchanged in 2008
10. There are numerous advantages for rich nations to lend aid to indigent ones with abundant natural resources, cheap labor and great chance to expand the market.
11. Aid acceptance can lead to some unwanted problems for the poor nations with their autonomy and cultural identity lost.
12. With a number of ancient architecture is destroyed, Hanoi lost its old-day.

MrGuedes · Accepted Answer

In many of these sentences, I find myself unable to tell if they're referring to a past, a present, or a future event, so I can't correct those. I have underlined those forms that have this problem, where I need more information regarding which tense they are referring to. I have also bolded and underlined the sentence numbers where there are other problems that condition my best correction.

1. Stabilizing in 2 months, the number of tourists declines significantly during the end of the year. (Past, present or future?)
2. Hitting the bottom at 100 points, S&P-index is predicted to gradually increase next year.
3. The number of Internet users experience an erratic trend at in the first 3 years, followed by a downward trend in the following 2 years. (Past, present or future?)
4. The gold output, which last year followed the downward trend, will rise significantly in the next year. (Only a possibility; due to the poor phrasing of the original sentence, I can't be sure this is right.)
5. After a slight decrease, the number of ~~television exported~~ exported televisions stabilizes at 2 million in two months later (?), ending the year with a quick increase.
6. Experiencing ~~with~~ a fluctuation between 300 and 900 from 2002 to 2007, the number of cars remained unchanged in the following 3 years ~~later~~ and hit a peak at 1200 at the end of the period.
7. The number of CDs consumed in Germany and Japan followed a downward trend in 2002, with the former dropping ~~form~~ from 3 million to 1 million and the latter from 5 million to 2 million. (Do you "consume" CDs? Maybe you should replace "consumed" with something like "bought" or "purchased".)
8. Despite the (or "In spite of the...") two opposite trends in the first 3 years, the unemployment rate of US and Canada remain stable, with the former standing at 3 million people and the latter at 1 million. (Past, present or future?)
9. The number of oversea students in Vietnam ~~was~~ has fluctuated in recent years, with a having significantly increased and hit a peak at 200,000 in 2006, a declined to 100,000 in 2007 and remained unchanged in 2008.
10. There are numerous advantages for rich nations to lend aid to indigent ones with abundant natural resources, cheap labor and great chance to expand the market. (I can't understand where the advantages end—or if they are there at all—, nor what is a great chance to expand the market; you should review that.)
11. Aid acceptance can lead to some unwanted problems for the poor nations, namely the loss of their autonomy and cultural identity ~~lost~~. (Only a possibility; I can't understand really if you mention those unwanted problems; if not, then this is probably not what you meant.)
12. With ~~a number of~~ much of the ancient architecture is destroyed (or "When ... was destroyed...), Hanoi lost its old-day.

Please review the sentences whose numbers are bolded and underlined, where I was unable to perform my best correction due to the lack of clarity of the original sentence. Then please tell me exactly what you meant there, so I can redo my correction.

Just another piece of information: you seem to have used American spellings throughout your sentences. If you are not aware of this yet, let me tell you that the British spelling for the words stabilize and labor are, respectively, stabilise and labour. If you prefer, you can use these forms, but it is always recommended that you be uniform throughout your texts.

MrGuedes · Answer

Oops!... Correction of my correction to the ninth sentence!

MrGuedes9. The number of oversea students in Vietnam ~~was~~ has fluctuated in recent years, with a having significantly increased and hit a peak at 200,000 in 2006, a declined to 100,000 in 2007 and remained unchanged in 2008.

Where I wrote "with a having", I meant to strike out "with a".

The sentence should hence be:

9. The number of oversea students in Vietnam ~~was~~ has fluctuated in recent years, ~~with a~~ having significantly increased and hit a peak at 200,000 in 2006, a declined to 100,000 in 2007 and remained unchanged in 2008.

Grammarfreak · Answer

This is my take on your sentences. I will try to work with the first 5 and offer my thoughts on your sentences.
If my observation is keen enough, you are trying to use participle (past and present ) phrase in your sentences. However, there are issues with tense, word choice, construction and subject- noun disagreement in general..

1. Stabilizing in 2 months, the number of tourists declines significantly during the end of the year.
Issues: The present participle phrase is incorrectly used as in the context in my opinion. "Declines" signifies present.
"The end of the year" seemed to be ambiguous. The tense and verb form do not agree with each other.

2. Hitting the bottom at 100 points,S&P-index is predicted to gradually increase next year.
This is Ok.

3. The number of internet user experience an erratic trend at first 3 years, follow by a downward trend in next 2 years.
Tense issues. What is an "erratic trend" ? Did you mean " fluctuation" ? The meaning is confusing.

4. The gold output, last year followed the downward trend, rise significantly in the next year.
Tense and construction error. Is this the meaning you had intended:
The gold production, suffered a downward trend the year before, rose significantly the next year.

5. After a slight decrease, the number of television exported stabilizes at 2 million in two months later, ending the year with a quick increase.

When we say " later", we need to establish a previous reference of time. Your sentence is understood but not it is a smooth structure.
I suggest: After a slight decline [in July] , the export of television stabilized at 2 million units [ in Sept], ending the year with a quick increase.

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